Emerson

Story Time by Edward Bloor? As Leja pointed out, it is best to include the title of the book and the author you are talking about, or no one has ...

This is weird. It could actually be interesting, but I have to admit it has way too many problems right now to even be moderately good. Until I seen him. ...

Moderator's Note I edited your surname out of the initial post. You should be careful with that stuff. Also, don't harass your critiques by saying you do not appreciate their ...

Ah! I am so angry. I wrote up my critique last night, but then my internet decided to quit working. So, without further interruptions, my critique! Diego stood [s]in place[/s] ...

Moderator's Note: Welcome to the site! Please do not use all capital letters in your thread titles! I edited them out for you. We also have a policy about critiquing ...

“All aboard,” he called at the top of his baritone voice, reverberating off the trees and making Jaden wince – every sound was one that could give him away. Is ...

William was eating lunch when he died. It's stuff like that that makes me love your writing. It was here that he realized [s]that[/s] he had no feet. He had ...

The only poetic device in this whole poem is "sun burns as red as cooked lobsters". Yes, it's a metaphor, but it is a cliché. The real big problem with ...

Heh, well, since you don't have much effort in it then it isn't that bad of a poem. It's not amazing or anything, but for your purpose, it works. How ...

Jabs, this is ultra cute! I throw my pen atop the table To read this poem (if I was able). I cringe, I cry, Yet deep inside, My talent was ...

I hate to say it, but this poem is a giant cliché in verse. You might want to ask yourself some questions about what you want to say: why is ...

Happy birthday! The Tank Man is beautiful. I like that one a lot more than sixteen , but I'll go into more depth so you understand why. Fist, some fixes! ...

Hello KJ! First of all, welcome to YWS. If you have any questions or need help finding something on the site feel free to PM me! I edited your title ...

Hello Calvin! “I’m hungry,” she says [comma] after the most recent song ends. I may be wrong. I think you should say that it is night time more near to ...

Then a hot guy walked by and he was like, "OMG! Can I have ur #?" and he was like "Sure." if you're going to have two people talk...please don't ...