Emerson

I'm going to move this to book reviews actually. No worries! There are so many places to put things, hah. Oy, I had to read The Awakening for my American ...

First off, welcome to the YWS! If you have any questions or need help finding something on the site, feel free to PM me. I highly suggest you read The ...

Hallo! Wie geht's? Ich werde lesen. ^_^ Nothing else but an endless cloudscape of soft grey beneath him and dark grey above. The word "cloudscape" here confuses me. I see ...

Hello OE! A beautiful thing happened this night— the storm clouds moved in. I find it interesting you chose to say "this night" rather than "to night". I don't think ...

Hello! I closed my eyes, breathing in her scent What does she smell like? the sweet way that her face changed during sleep What does "the sweet way" look like? ...

Penguin's comments about moving words, and it needing more are completely apt. I have some thoughts to add! What I think about this when I first read it is that ...

Hello there Bat Chick! I made your title lower case, and not all caps. It's annoying for titles to be in all caps - please do not do it. Also, ...

This didn't make sense. I'll just use the end as an example: He was once a shadow upon my doorstep, He was once a ghost on my trembling frame, But ...

Hey Sorsha! I don't think I've seen you around here before. Nice to meet you! Just a little grammar note: Betrayal cuts deeper [s]then[/s] than any knife and hurts more ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! I see you're new, so if you have any questions about the site or need help finding your way around, feel free to PM me. ...

Hey there! First I would like to say welcome to YWS. Why don't you tell us about yourself in the Welcome Section ? Have you read The Rules yet? Maybe ...

This poem looked like it needed some love. I think you have some really great lines here, or some great ideas. The first stanza has to be my favorite; the ...

From the first stanza this starts to get confusion. Rather than writing a meaningful poem about dreams and what they mean, you are sticking to a rhyme that then falls ...

The first thing that throws me off is the title. Paradise Lost is the name of the epic poem by Milton. I'd consider finding something more unique, and less attached ...

I'm not sure if it cuts off by intention or by error... Either way, Welcome to YWS? If you have any questions about the site feel free to PM me. ...