Emerson

Helllo and welcome to the YWS! If you have any questions about the site or need help finding something feel free to message me. I thought this stanza was the ...

Hello Cade! I know our poetry styles clash, so this review might simply be a cranky style rant from me, but I'll give it anyway because it might be of ...

Hello Via! *snuggles* And happy birthday! against lighted rooms of windows This line bothered me more than anything. It throws me off. Saying that the rooms are lit just doesn't ...

My biggest complaint would be the utter lack of punctuation. Some poetry can survive without, but I think this would do much better with. The above reviewer said feathers can't ...

Hullo! I concur with Connie. Up until your last stanza, I was thinking, "Wow, the rhyme scheme flows so nicely!" Then I was attacked by the awkward afar/war rhyme. It's ...

Welcome to the YWS! I'm also a Mod. ^^ Aren't you lucky, two mod reviews and one from kissthewtich! She is a fine poetry reviewee. I honestly only have two ...

As the above, I enjoyed this. ^^ I'm not incredebly fond of the repetition of "touch me on my thigh" probably because the word thigh is just so strange, and ...

Hi there! He was coming. He was coming. I think saying this once would suffice. Also is there any way you could write this without the verb "to be"? Maybe ...

Hi there! I have to say this was a particularly interesting read. The narrator really caught me. At first I didn't felt so interested, but for some reason the voice ...

I like this because it starts out as a cheery poem that might be all love and brightness, but it's actually incredebly dark. Some of the writing is moderate, but ...

Hey there! 'tell me,' she whispers 'what you see.' and casts her empty eyes The last line of this stanza bugs me because it seems grammatically weird so it throws ...

Hey there! This was certainly my favorite stanza: When God's hand repaints the sky, And the day's replaced by night, We'll tell them the world's beautiful, And it's such a ...

I like this a lot, but reading over it a few more times, I'm not certain I understand it. Haha, this is frustraiting for me because I want to hope ...

Hey there Jare Bear! I have to agree with Nate; this comes off more as a story than a poem. You don't exactly use any poetical devices apart from line ...

Hey there! I adore the imagery you have in this poetry. It is so beautiful and spot on. My problem with this poem, however, is that I don't know what ...