Emerson

*cough* I will admit I didn't read the last two verses, but with good reason. What you have here, is a love poem, yes? There is a certain technique to ...

I'm just going to get sick one day and die. Lack of punctuation! Punctuation & Poetry It's very nice article. I like the idea behind it, but the poem it ...

It's good, up until the last verse. I didn't like it very much, it ended too quickly. and collapse on the bench. its just so bluh for how much emotion ...

*dies a little inside* May I guide you to look at an article for me? Poetry & Punctuation . Read it, study it, learn it, use it. This was very ...

I liked the theme behind it, and the way it ended. The short lines added for very quick, emotional burst. She goes, teary, to the dead castle, sees her husband, ...

You should space out your work, to make it easier to read. Medea stood staring [s]fixedly[/s] ahead I don't like -ly words, instead, try to find a better verb than ...

Unnoticed, blood dripped from his nose, bursting silently on the floorboards. to burst, which not only seems like the wrong verb for such a thing, and silent are too different ...

Kyle twisted around and saw Ariel standing his room. missing words. She hadn’t aged a day, sitting the bed right now. missing another word. Brad that was really, really f'ed ...

Beauty sighed contentedly as she padded across the cool marble flooring of the dining hall. *shoots the -ly word* you don't need it. No matter how lively and beautiful their ...

Well: Lucy, don't beg for critiques or "bump" The nurse led Skye down the white corridor toward a room Skye always thought of as the Hello Room. When her Uncle ...

WOW. This was just perfect. No errors. I loved the end. "Like I always do." hee hee hee. Why was Jon so hesitant to speak about Danielle? Are they having ...

I agree with Chandni, there really isn't any flow to this or pattern. As for the subject of the poem, it isn't new. Try to make the reader connect with ...

Catalina peeled her eyes away from his worried ones don't make your character's eyes do funky things. This piece is very short... its well written in some places, then in ...

his strides were as a silent as his presence. take out the extra 'a' The dark haired one sat on the edge of the bed with her legs drawn up ...

you don't really need to go "meeeeeeeeeeee" We want to read the lyrics and see if they are pretty, not see how you might sing them. Also some of your ...