Emerson

I'm not entirely sure what to say XD I read it, but the rhyming clawed at my brain, strangely enough, and so did the flow. Something about it all together ...

This text is really long, so I may not get through it all right now, just so you know. I distinctly remember that it started and ended in the muggy ...

Ehh... I'll go easy, in the sense that I will make this as short as possible. I could see it being lyrics, but this isn't poetry. Poetry is meant to ...

Oh gosh. I'm going to be really harsh, okay? To me, this wasn't a all. It was like something I would receive in a chain letter and quickly delete rather ...

I think a lot has been said, and though I haven't read all that has been said, I'm sure it would cover anything I have to say, other than this: ...

the fact that the "Is Him" line was so much shorter than the others was rather irritating for me, not to mention that you rhymed "him" with "in" so the ...

I love reading, and rereading your poetry. It always takes me a few minutes to really pick up the actions, pick up the meanings. But with your poetry I think ...

You've fallen asleep at the wheel again thrust back into the dark ages of a past life no one to pity you now boy This part of the poem is ...

Your rhythm/meter is off. There is no strict pattern to it, and sometimes the couplets aren't even the same length. And I'm just going to Echo 'Manda. This was vague, ...

I liked it though it comes off vague, I feel like you could have put just a little bit more into it. You're just telling us stuff, and slightly making ...

Meh... I'm going to be bluntly honest, okay? Don't get too hurt, I hope. The blog entry was horribly annoying. If the rest of the story is narrative, what is ...

I put spaces between your paragraphs, or at least where I could see paragraphs (so If I messed up, sorry!). This make it easier to read, try to do this ...

“Jonathon,” Dr. Colbert said, lightly tapping on the door and stepping inside. makes me think of Steven Colbert. Ha ha. “I could feel it. It was watching us—it spoke to ...

He could hear them whispering amongst one another as if confused with what to do to him. Either a comma after "another" or put "they" in between 'if' and 'confused. ...

and the city was rapidly heading towards a quarantine if things did not resolve themselves quickly. something about this bothers me. It doesn't sound right. Not sure why. She let ...