Em16

Specific Comments: Paragraph 1: I like that you start off with the two elves arguing about whether faeries exist. Humans argue about whether faeries are real, too, so it makes ...

Specific Comments: Section 1, Stanza 1, Line 3: I was a little confused by the phrase “scrambled-egg mind”. It just seems really weird. What do you mean this phrase? Is ...

This was definitely very interesting. When I saw the words “blind date” I was expecting something cheesy, where the boy and girl magically fall in love after one glance. Or ...

Hey! I’m Em16, and I enjoyed reading your autobiographical story. It was totally crazy, and the fact that it was true made it even crazier. I liked all the really ...

Hey! I’m a huge Star Wars fan (and have written a few Star Wars fics of my own) so I was super excited to read your story. I love the ...

Hey! Nice job with this essay. I’ve read Hamlet before, but it did not ever occur to me that Gertrude might have been responsible for Ophelia’s death. Reading your essay ...

Hey! Nice job with this piece. I liked the way you wove history into the story, and explained the specifics of battles between Poland and the Ottoman Empire. I don’t ...

I like the sense of motion in this poem. The stanzas, to me, felt like feet on the pavement, pounding and moving forward. That really kept me hooked and reading. ...

I loved the sense of anticipation. As I read more and more, I became more curious about the story. I have so many questions, and I want to read on ...

Wow. I don’t know what to say. That was a lot. There was a lot of action, and I could not read fast enough. I was impressed by your fast ...

First of all, I was impressed by the beauty contained in these eight lines. It’s such a short space, yet you were able to convey so many ideas and images. ...

Just FYI, I haven’t read any of the preceding parts of the story, so I don’t really know everything that’s going on. Specific Comments: I was confused by the sentence ...

Specific Comments: “The room was small, a lot smaller than some of the other places they had been told to wait before they were called on stage”. This sentence is ...

*Just a disclaimer, I haven’t read the first two chapters of A Scandal in Gotham. Nice job! I was really impressed by this story and the suspense it contained. I ...

So, I made comments on your piece based on the stanza and line number. If it says S1, L4, that means Stanza 1, Line 4. I counted the line “you ...