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Re: destiel
Hey, it's Ellsegar here to do a review! So let's get started. First off, the first sentence is a little awkward. When I first read it, I almost thought it ...
Mar 9, 2016 -
Re: Seven Days Of Life
Hey... It's Ellesegar for your review! So let's get started. First off, the description thrills me, but when I start to read, I'm disappointed. The first lines don't thrill me ...
Mar 9, 2016 -
Re: The Days of the Week
Hey it's Ellesegar, here to do a review.. So without further ado, let's begin. So, let me just say I love this poem. It totally describes my week. It's amazing. ...
Mar 9, 2016 -
Re: China story
Hey... so it's Ellesegar here to do a review for your work! So without further ado, let the reviewing begin.:) You really need a good hook. Just that sentence as ...
Mar 9, 2016 -
Re: of empires and stomachaches
Heyyy... so it's Ellesegar here, doing a review. So without further ado, let the grreeeeaaattt reviewing begin! First off, I really like this poem. It's new, innovative and I really ...
Mar 8, 2016 -
Re: Half-Animal 1-3
Hey.. It's Ellesegar to do a quick review on your work. First off... Your profile picture is awesome... :) lol and speaking of awesome, your writing piece is awesome! Seriously. ...
Mar 8, 2016 -
Re: Nightmare (Some Editing)
Hey... It's Ellesegar here to give you a grrrreeeaattt review:) I'm not going to be all super critical, but there are several grammar parts that could be fixed. So let's ...
Mar 8, 2016 -
Re: The Ancients
Hey it's Ellesegar, giving you a review... So without further ado, let the reviewing begin. First off, I love the first line. It's so captivating and it is super cool! ...
Mar 8, 2016 -
Re: A love wrecked by society
Hey, it's Ellesegar doing a review... Lol so let me jump right in. It's very very very good. I really like it. It is very sad, but you make it ...
Mar 8, 2016 -
Re: Eric
Hey! So it's Ellesegar... And this is amazing. The descriptions were great, I loved how you described her physical appearance. In the second sentence though, you probably should change "laying" ...
Mar 7, 2016 -
Re: Beyond -- Prologue
Hey! This prologue is absolutely, positively amazing. It's so descriptive and imaginative. I love the way you talked about the running through the forest and made it all seem so ...
Mar 7, 2016
