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  • Short Story » Fantasy, Fanfiction Re: destiel

    Hey, it's Ellsegar here to do a review! So let's get started. First off, the first sentence is a little awkward. When I first read it, I almost thought it ...

    Mar 9, 2016
  • Short Story » Realistic, Narrative Re: Seven Days Of Life

    Hey... It's Ellesegar for your review! So let's get started. First off, the description thrills me, but when I start to read, I'm disappointed. The first lines don't thrill me ...

    Mar 9, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Humor Re: The Days of the Week

    Hey it's Ellesegar, here to do a review.. So without further ado, let's begin. So, let me just say I love this poem. It totally describes my week. It's amazing. ...

    Mar 9, 2016
  • Short Story » Culture, Action / Adventure Re: China story

    Hey... so it's Ellesegar here to do a review for your work! So without further ado, let the reviewing begin.:) You really need a good hook. Just that sentence as ...

    Mar 9, 2016
  • Poetry » Politics, Humor Re: of empires and stomachaches

    Heyyy... so it's Ellesegar here, doing a review. So without further ado, let the grreeeeaaattt reviewing begin! First off, I really like this poem. It's new, innovative and I really ...

    Mar 8, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Science Fiction Re: Half-Animal 1-3

    Hey.. It's Ellesegar to do a quick review on your work. First off... Your profile picture is awesome... :) lol and speaking of awesome, your writing piece is awesome! Seriously. ...

    Mar 8, 2016
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Nightmare (Some Editing)

    Hey... It's Ellesegar here to give you a grrrreeeaattt review:) I'm not going to be all super critical, but there are several grammar parts that could be fixed. So let's ...

    Mar 8, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Teen Fiction Re: The Ancients

    Hey it's Ellesegar, giving you a review... So without further ado, let the reviewing begin. First off, I love the first line. It's so captivating and it is super cool! ...

    Mar 8, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Romantic Re: A love wrecked by society

    Hey, it's Ellesegar doing a review... Lol so let me jump right in. It's very very very good. I really like it. It is very sad, but you make it ...

    Mar 8, 2016
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Eric

    Hey! So it's Ellesegar... And this is amazing. The descriptions were great, I loved how you described her physical appearance. In the second sentence though, you probably should change "laying" ...

    Mar 7, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Teen Fiction Re: Beyond -- Prologue

    Hey! This prologue is absolutely, positively amazing. It's so descriptive and imaginative. I love the way you talked about the running through the forest and made it all seem so ...

    Mar 7, 2016


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