Elizabeth

Hmm... lexy: YOU'RE NAME IS IN THE POEM! :) That's cool. I wouldn't really call this iambic pentameter though. I forgot the definition from the Romeo and Juilet parody, but... ...

But…Just…how, dont't capital just. I am not sure, there was the mazimum of 3 words in a line... that sort of bugged me and the poem itself, sort of frightened ...

Of course Brad, I can't really critique but I kinda affree with Yellow Boy up there. I liked it though, of course it's nearly 6 AM in the damn mornign ...

I'm not really going to critique, I think that there were so many big words that I'm going to lose sleep over this... Heh. I enjoyed it... I especially liked ...

I'm totally have to relate to this poem because I'm so freaking nervous some of my family members are going to be drafted. Anything can happen now... This poem, although ...

Hmm... I really enjoyed this... I think that you do need to make the stanzas more than 2 or 4 lines by combining them... I really liked this... I rememebr ...

She's the only thing he see's Coming from the bathroom I think you should change that to ... see Is coming... Otherwise... wow, this is really ... wow. Beautifullly worded ...

Cathy: THey're called Stanzas, not paragraphs. This is probably a poem... yeah I coudl barely read this. I'm not illiterate or anything but there were too many words in a ...

Yeah ... wow... *picks up tissue* I never knew your pain O' beautiful tissues * blows nose upon it and tosses it away* Now where was I... Yeah, this has ...

................................. Ahh.... Um... Wow... Nobody is really dead... are they?! I mean... dead people... scare me sort of. I liked this... I liked the first two lines but then after ...

As I stumble onto the stage My shadow walks beside me, without complaint Silent slender feet padding onto the floor Its ankles clinging to my own Wobbly ones, weak from ...

I liked much of your other work... and since this was fantasy I couldn't generally complain... I, myself, haven't written or read poetry for over 5 months now... I think ...

You're going to have to sing this for me one day... but my mom just stole my phone so I'm basically an outcast... ... ... ... All but my books ...

Don’t tell your mother what to spend her mother on. ...... I think you need to replace a mother with the word money. It's early... I'm going to sleep now, ...

To day the least, the ending creeped me out to the maximum. A lot of your sentences give a ton of action, leaving nothing for the imagination: such as: "Dracchus ...