Elizabeth

Hmm... shouldn't your name be awesomewriter And shouldn't this be an awesome writing? ... ... ... I, seriously, did not like this poem... I mean... I don't know, the lines ...

I'll summarize what I read. The intro. And that... needed so many punctuation fixings... I wrot elike this when either I'm in a hurry and they're only notes or when ...

Well can't give that much of a useful critique at the moment but I'll come back.. If the rhyming is dodgy, then don't rhyme. The ending was a bit cruel, ...

Basically what Snoink and Brad said. I like all the words, but the lines equaled jerky and that's what basically made me stop reading... because I do not finish many ...

Um... I liked it, thought it was pretty cool, but then end ending totally threw me off.... from The entire last stanza to the very last line. I mean, who ...

"Emotions you feel are something" ... Something what? I think it has potential... I really do... but the rhyming dragged it down a bit, in my opinion and it seems ...

Brad, you're cruel, God I love you. ... Feelingless? ... Seriously. Trash teh first 2 lines on the second and third stanzas.... I don't know, it had potential... but I ...

What is it with you and cups of coffee? :P I'm sorry but I sort of imagined when the drinks collided that there was a guy getting his face burnt ...

WOw, I thought the first stanza was really beautiful! I think the last stanza was beautiful also but the lines kinda threw me off somehow... I don't know how but ...

It's your first anything you posted here *Stalks you* hee hee.... ... This poem depresses me beyond be-damn-lief. I think you were too... ... ... you said You couldn't do ...

Hmm... First line was too long... You used the word like a bit too much. This seems a bit too... depressing. I liked the end. Hmm... shorten first line, get ...

I think every ex soldier has seriously feelings like this... War is not fun.... I liked this a lot... I really did, it was a graet poem with great wording ...

... bit morbid... I think that you told more than explained... this didn't leave much to the imagination... and... yeah... I think that it's just a bit too creepy for ...

Lieing is spelt lying I'm and I... Alright, um... I did like this but... DID YOU EVER THINK? that the question mark doesn't belong right there? I can't really say ...

First off... I can't really read this Format it better... And what's with the periods before some words? Augh... ... ... the lines were too long, I thought this was ...