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I stood in front of the mirror, brushing my pixie style hairdo, with bangs that grazed my eyebrows above my sky blue eyes. Each time the comb went through my ...

I was proud of my friend for serving in Germany, without getting killed. The comma isn't needed. It was uncomfortable to be there, most of the men and women there ...

A child ran up the path, her feet dragging through the leaves making a joyful cracking sound. You could easily put a comma after leaves . a boy called after ...

In this game they had 2 teams Spell out numbers. and tried to kick a leather ball filled filled with animal hair past goal posts. You typed filled twice. The ...

The reason for the fancy socks and her picking me up is a funeral. This sentence doesn't make sense. Try using another word besides and . Around me, jumpstart conversations ...

By the time you realise that you were right, it’ll be too late. Realise should be [/i]realized.[/i] There were dozens of other’s that would do the job Other's should be ...

Everyone knows the saying "It feels so right when it's wrong." There should be a comma after saying . She chose Greece for our next vacation after watching Sisterhood of ...

The sky caught fire as the sun sank into the trees. That’s all there ever is around here, trees. They are all so tall and quiet, Kirthin thought. From the ...

Etched with all the despair and sadness this world could offer, I was sure of it. This sentence needs to be two sentences. I looked like myself now, I was ...

After his birth his parents wrapped him in a blanket and left him in the middle of the woods. There should be a comma after birth . He was out ...

thought Ryan to herself as they slammed her head pack into the pavement. Pack should be back . After helping her up Ryan was able to get a closer look ...

With only a population of three million spread out throughout seven cities it was uncommon to have so much military activity, but the little green-purple planet was special. There should ...

The year, 2113, the earth finally built its first station beyond the moon. This sentence is awkward to read. If you put an in in front of the first the ...

I didn't find any grammer or spelling mistakes. The underlined words should be in italics. When they are underlined, it is too hard to read the story because you want ...

The seven year old poked his teacher’s still body. Who is seven; Maxim? When you describe him, he seems older. Back home at last. This sentence is awkward. Reword it. ...