EliteHusky

Don't worry about writers block, it will soon fade. I quite enjoyed the dialogue you had and it seemed almost like the Twilight series (yes I've read the first three). ...

Great! Very poetic. I especially liked how you used the term "Sea Gulls" after the sentence containing "Sea rolls", blended very well. If I had to label this piece into ...

Interesting. Firstly when you said "Most others are running", I had to pause because the way that was structured is not very smooth. Suggested replacement would include "While others are ...

I will not criticize this piece on content, I have no right to. Whatever the subject matter is it is YOUR freedom of expression. I gave this a "Needs Improvement" ...

Good! I did enjoy your submission! The level of detail you used blended extremely well with that one repetition of "pounding". I’m tucked up in bed, so deliciously cosy. Nothing ...

First of all in regards to your ambition to send articles to a newspaper let me wish you good luck. As I read this piece I could not help but ...

Let me preface my reply by saying that I will be brutally honest, constructive, but honest all the same. I enjoyed this piece and it's poetic format. I especially liked ...

I am more than happy to share some of my thoughts regarding this entry. I froze as the scent of the hospital room entered my nostrils; clean, fresh and penetrating. ...

Good. This piece definitely has promise. One suggestion to help things go more smoothly would be swap the "the" from, The flock to a ""They". In the second paragraph when ...

Hello! Very interesting plot line. Some of the material, specifically the bit about killing the homeless, were a bit disturbing but I imagine there was an element of comedy involved, ...

Very Good. The storyline was interesting to follow and your dialogue was exceptional. “N-nothing,” I replied nervously and stepped closer, staring at the boy. One of the things I liked ...

Hello Stripes, Overall I felt that the poem constructed an atmosphere reminiscent of Alice in Wonderland. That may sound strange, but granted I mean that as a complement. I really ...

I love the small hymns you created throughout this piece. Your detailed descriptions really made reading your story more enjoyable as I felt that I could possibly relate to some ...

Very good poem. It is often hard to establish a rhythm early on, and even harder to to establish one that attracts readers but this poem did establish one that ...

Hello, Great poem. What I really liked about this poem was the introductory smoothness. For example, you had rhymes that made sense, and the endings of each verse, because they ...