EliteHusky

The young woman was free, and I- a man of six and twenty years- was a prisoner of wrong love. Antiquated way of referring to the character's age but I ...

Those tiny pellets that the world shoots at you; they just graze enough to hurt, to annoy, and to make you wallow in self pity. Good description. For the rest, ...

*Just started reading Chapter 17 without covering the first 16 Good news: After finishing the chapter, aside from a few names and minor details, I could grasp the content. Bad ...

Frederick Lovelace, the founder and retired principal of this fine, fine establishment, had once declared that the beach was the perfect metaphor for education, that it represented “the crossing of ...

Almost unconsciously, he swept back his hair, a tangled mess of curly blond that was probably too long by normal standards and certainly too long by the standards of Saint ...

As Dandilion tries to stop the killing of a the Wolf supposedly plagueing the town, Best to pick either "a Wolf" or "the Wolf" as you used both. Ajerbae When ...

Firstly I will inform you that this poem was devilishly good. It was witty and if that word is too overused let me replace it with sarcastically hilarious. Suffocating is ...

Good start. You begin by using "why" and the term itself somewhat makes the reader expect an answer or at least some rational. It starts off by asking very broad ...

This surely has every reader singing along to the lyrics albeit, they can get over G rated at times. I especially liked the line, Oh, I'm so dumb and naive ...

Good use of repetition. I did not find it too overwhelming because it seemed to have a purpose for dramatic effect. My only issue would be the first verse, Fall, ...

Firstly regarding, Trees, a couple bush, more trees, a couple of cars, some people walking, even more trees...They I may need to double check on this, and I would invite ...

Personal experiences, dreams, can all be a source of inspiration. Channelling your personal experiences in writing is a good skill. With that said, I agree with the previous comments in ...

Firstly, you have a very strong ending. When writing closing the story can be the toughest part but I liked what you did involving the dialogue between the main character ...

Working backwards let me start off by congratulating you on successfully, in my own interpretation at least, pulling off the "it was all a dream" move. The characters are likeable. ...

The critical aspect of this piece that I enjoyed was the smoothness in transition from the beginning to the end. It was like following a very short but energy-packed story ...