Elinor

Hi! So, this was an interesting and cute discovery seeing as how it's December 22nd and the apocalypse is now just an irrelevant story we'll tell our kids to make ...

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Thanks, guys! I'll definitely work on expanding this. Dudette - he's not really alive again. She's just hallucinating that he is.

This has been edited! In light of Valentine's Day it would be nice if I could get some fresh feedback. :) Thanks to everyone who commented on this, all of ...

This has been edited with suggestions taken into account. :)

This has been edited with the suggestions taken into account -- new feedback would be much appreciated!

Thanks for the comments, everyone! I've edited with your suggestions. I concentrated on embellishing on the ending a bit; I hope this version is better! I'm glad you guys liked ...

Shadow -- yep, it's the moon. I had thought that I had made it fairly obvious and I was hoping to get by the story without naming where he was ...

Thanks for the helpful critiques, guys. I've rewritten this and tried to everything y'all have said into account, so fresh opinions would be wonderful!

Thanks, but this is old and I'm not looking for any further advice. Locked.

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Cal, it's beautiful! :D Thank you so much!

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Hi again Cali! So, I don't have that much to say because you've made this new draft much, much better then the original. The story feels a lot more coherent ...