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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: What should I do now?

    Hi there! Before I begin the review, I just have a quick note. You have six literary works posted and zero reviews. I'll review this you once, but please try ...

    Mar 4, 2010
  • Other » General, General Re: Zenith

    Hi Demitri! Welcome to YWS. Here is my review, as requested. I feel bad about this one because there isn't really anything I disliked about these collection of stories. You've ...

    Mar 1, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Window Breakers and Risk Takers

    Hi bmat! I really liked this. It was a short poem with a meaningful tone and message to it. However, you weren't very strong in area of actually writing it. ...

    Feb 28, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Grace

    Is this a villanelle? It's very, very well done, considering that these poems can be some of the hardest to write. You pulled it off rather nicely; the tone and ...

    Feb 28, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Forgiveness

    Hello there! I just would like to say that I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. It was a nice idea, the writing is fresh and clean. However, there were a few ...

    Feb 27, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Clothes

    Haha, awesome Snoink. This is a haiku, yes? I thought it was pretty awesome, and I laughed a little at the end. My only problem is that the lines seem ...

    Feb 27, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Dally's Girl

    Hi! Sorry it took so long for me to get back to you on this, but school bites, ya know? Anyway, to the review. This was just okay. I liked ...

    Feb 27, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Cricket

    Hello, Firearris. his is an interesting poem, and I'm trying to decide how I feel about it. I really want to like it, but something just falls flat. I don't ...

    Feb 26, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: FREAK

    Wow, Karina. I read the whole thing-it was amazing. Seriously, please try to find a publisher for this. I could see potential of it doing very, very well. I remember ...

    Feb 25, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: I'll Wait

    Hi Sarah! I really liked this poem and I only had a few minor things that I wanted to nitpick this. I am playing a game that you made for ...

    Feb 21, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: trans-neptunian

    Full of your usual brillance, Mr. Kylan. You had some great imagery, and this poem followed and very interesting and cohesive plot. Where did you get the idea, may I ...

    Feb 20, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: soulmate

    Hi! I liked this! However, I do have a few tiny problems with it. Please refer to comments, and the corrections I have made in green. Who is my soulmate ...

    Feb 20, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Bird of Recess

    Hey there! Here is your requested review! This was a pretty good piece. I didn't have many problems at all with this poem. You had fantastic imagery and good description ...

    Feb 20, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Triple Travel Tales Series 1 Part 1 --Critics Wanted!

    Hi TripleTravelTales. I'd love to review this, but it's way, way too long me. I did a quick word count check, and this is 5,452 words, which translates out to ...

    Feb 20, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Nature of Man: Sloth

    Hi Fofxire. How are you? This story has a lot of potential, and I was interested when I began reading. However, your execution was not the best. What do I ...

    Feb 20, 2010


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