Give way to those who break windows. They have something to say;
And the one’s who dare to pull out their hair may have the cure one day;
We all think before we know, judging we just may;
But in the end when said is done, and done is left to say;
Everyone is special and unique in their own way;
Let’s all smile and get along; so have a seat, a drink, and stay.
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Hi bmat! I really liked this. It was a short poem with a meaningful tone and message to it. However, you weren't very strong in area of actually writing it. When I read a line, sometimes It blank, and other times I was left confused.
I added 'the' and 'may' for two reasons. The first reason is flow. If you read the lines with the revisions, they seem more complete, don't they? Secondly, I added 'may' because there are those who would go about breaking windows simply because they have nothing better to do.
I don't understand this line, as the context doesn't really make much sense. Could you mean, "nothing is left to say", perhaps?
My favorite line of the whole poem.
Anyway! I liked this, and I'm going to "like" it. Please shoot me a PM if you have any questions.
-Elinor
Wow. Your title really hooked me and this was very well written. I think you might want to include the whole "Risk Takers" bit into the story. Otherwise I really like this. Notice right under the title it says, Likes: 2? The second one is from me! Well done.