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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Pop-Corn

    Hi! You know, of all the poems I've read of yours so far, I think this is the best. I like that's it simple and fun. I just had two ...

    May 3, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Possibility Of Fireflies

    Hi! So, I don't know what to think of this poem right now. To me, it seems like an outline of something that could be much, much better. Well, first ...

    May 2, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Athena's Sanctuary

    Hi Kara! So, I really liked the story! In a way it felt my own story feel more complete, like it filled in a lot of gaps, and I just ...

    May 2, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Zoraster Immolates Himself On A Rising Star Near The Equator

    Hi Gal. I'm not exactly sure to critique this poem. It's certainly different, and the rhymes make it cute. Would it be a limerick, by any chance? Either way, I ...

    May 2, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Love, Demise and Last Goodbyes ~ Her

    Hi Lala! So, there were a few things I liked and a few things I didn't like about the story. It's a definite improvement over your first part! The issues ...

    May 2, 2010
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Her Last Drink Is Coffee; one

    Hi Hannah! So, like Navita and Snoink, I found this really confusing. I think you've got a promising start with good characters, but it goes by way too quickly and ...

    May 2, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: FREAK

    Hi Karina! My goodness, I think I'm in love with this story. It's so unbelievably compelling, and the edits made it ten times better; I liked how you were able ...

    May 2, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Slipped

    Hi! Thanks for critiquing my story! I thought I'd return the favor and critique yours. I understand that this is old, but if you want to improve this, there are ...

    May 2, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Three Crowns - Prologue

    Hi! Okay, so you have a lot happening in this prologue! We're introduced to a creepy old theater and we learn a terrifying secret about it. However, you may have ...

    May 2, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: .

    Hi again, Rosey! There were only two major comments that I really had with this part. Firstly, I want to say that it is indeed a major, major improvement over ...

    May 2, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: .

    Hi Rosey! I didn't really enjoy this. I can definitely see some potential in it, but right now it's just very rough. I had to read it through about three ...

    May 2, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Sydney~The Follow up

    Hi! So I read this over twice, and I was thinking one thing: slow down! In the first part, you had a lot of moments of subtly that really allowed ...

    May 1, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Sydney (A quickwrite)

    Hi Kit! So, I'm really torn as to what my general thoughts on this piece are. There were a few things I liked, and a few things I didn't like. ...

    May 1, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Love the Scenario

    Hi! To be honest with you, this poem left me quite confused. I couldn't really understand what it is about and what new knowledge you wanted the reader to walk ...

    May 1, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Time to move on

    Hi! I'm not going to lie; I really, really liked this poem. I think that it had a nice flow to it, and the rhythm is extremely catchy. Your simple, ...

    May 1, 2010


Now I realize that there is no righteous path, it’s just people trying to do their best in a world where it is far too easy to do your worst.
— Castiel