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Powerful, simple, and effective. I'm always the last to review these poems and can't find anything that hasn't been said... "I believe I was abused, most definately," Maybe I'm reading ...

*stares* I would swear on my life this was written for Hunter (the character, not me) Which is pretty frickin awesome, cuz this poem is filled with awesomeness. GAH Anyway, ...

Hmmm...lessee... --a line that seemed too long for me was "I myself used to be idealistic" IMO, it should just be "I used to be idealistic" --is Naivety a word? ...

*mumbles* paragraphs and spaces between them would make it easier to read... Anther vampire novel eh? Looks good to me so moves a little quickly, we don't get any character ...

ack! That's terrible! (the event, not the story lol) My only concern is the lack of motive for the killing of the dog...there doesn't seem to be one. Also, there ...

just one corrections here... Luke grabbed a few napkins and pressed them against his bleeding cheek, with throbbed uncontrollably "with" should be "which," just a simple typo I'm sure. My ...

*Message deleted. Flaming is not tolerated on this board* - FS. Nice catch fire starter From what I read, Meshalidar, this looks to be awesome. Hopefully I'll get around to ...

It was interesting, but what a lot of people don't understand is that this book is FICTIONAL... there's a lot of chaos theory and just plain guesses, though he does ...

Feedback eh... If it had been seven years since her mother's death, how could she age ten years? Or did I miss something and this is just figurative? I also ...

In my opinion, I think you should do a little expanding and describing of characters, that was the reader has a mental pic of them before you send them on ...

The one major thing I notyiced that no one has mentioned is that when the character reaches the top of the stairs...he(she) runs right back down. I think you may ...

The mob had swelled to over three dozen now, with several flaming torches, a few pitchforks and the leader patting his obligatory{{{this word seems odd when used here...}}} club menacingly. ...