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I can't help but laugh at the title of this thread, because, by its very nature, will make many of the prominent members of YWS avoid it altogether. The funny ...

Okay, my first comment is the spacing Please double space your paragraphs, that way it is easier to read. My next reaction was confusion. For all the action going on, ...

On a busy commercial street there was a shop. It was tucked away between larger buildings, secluded and dark. Out of the flow of commuters, stepped a tall man in ...

Hola Doe-- Astrath’s tattoo was still burning the next day; he dipped his hand into the cool water which made it seem much larger than it actually was. The way ...

Come on, Griffy-Poo, get yer butt in gear and write more! If you don't have more written by the time you read this, I'll personally drive down there and poke ...

Well, you may not know where you were coming from, but it sure makes perfect sense to me! Many of the phrases you used hit close to home, haha, and ...

As per your request, JigSaw--will update as I write it. There is a place. In this place horrors roam free, screams go unheard, and a battle for supremacy between Man ...

Indeed, 'tis short and sweet. A suggestion, if I may; I'm not sure why you chose to put the poem in the past/ present/ future form. I think the future/ ...

...a teacher? Where'd that come from, Snoinky? Very randomacious of you. I disagree about needing to pinpoint an historical figure to compare Bernard to--For me, the first part of the ...

Your description of Havoc was AWESOME, Torpid. I got a great feel for what he looked like from it. I really like this so far. I didn't notice any thing ...

I'm really liking this so far, Jiggy. I really think you try to make it too poetic, perhaps too complicated. You seem to use a lot of big words, which ...

I adored my finals this semester; I was forty minutes late for my Spanish Final, and still managed to take the test and leave before anyone else in the class. ...

I did not care for this as much as I could have. There was far too much technical stuff, and not enough story/ character. I don't know about the others, ...

Impressive as always; There's nothing for me to say that hasn't already said (curse you Mesh), and I don't really feel like beating a dead I'll leave it at that. ...

Meh. I don't care for this, honestly. You didn't develop enough of a character for Sam for the reader to really care when she showed up at the doorstep....I think ...