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Re: my definition for love!
Hey I am Erin, and well for starters, this is poetry and you really didn't put it in any poetry format. It made it very hard to review. In overall ...
Mar 3, 2010 -
Re: The Guardian Angel Files- Chapter 1
Hey I'm Erin and I'll be reviewing your work tonight. I know what I did was unsuitable, but is love all that immoral? Is loveāthe definition being a profoundly tender, ...
Mar 3, 2010 -
Re: A Meaningless Conversation
Hey I'm Erin, and I'll review your work for you. First off welcome to YWS. I really like your imagery throughout your entire poem. I especially liked the strong statements ...
Feb 18, 2010 -
Re: My Phenology
Hey it's Erin, and I loved this. Phenology isn't normally the subject I read but definitely you caught my attention well. You did an awesome job of describing without being ...
Feb 11, 2010 -
Re: Phoenix
Hey this is Erin, and first off: I liked your honesty. I like how you didn't just give advice and left it open ended many people wouldn't take it serious ...
Feb 10, 2010 -
Re: Fox Hill part 1
Hey I'm Erin and first of, very interesting start. Though I must say, it's really hard to comment on something so short. You had a few errors like: She called ...
Feb 10, 2010 -
Re: The Santa Tournament
Okay hey first, Loved the story line. It was completely original and while I was reading I could almost see a little child hearing that story before going to sleep. ...
Feb 9, 2010 -
Re: Together.
Hey FazoliMoli, I really liked this poem, it was heart felt but not so dramatic. The only thing I can comment is how you only rhyme on occasions, or well ...
Feb 8, 2010 -
Re: Lithium Preface
Hey I really liked this and actually really want to read more... All of this was my fault. How could I have let this happen! I shouldn't have been so ...
Feb 8, 2010 -
Re: The Black Path
Hey there, Alrighty, this was hard to read all the way through because how long it was. I read it though because, trust me I know how it is when ...
Feb 7, 2010 -
Re: It's Been You- Chapter 1 [still editing]
Hi there! When I read this, I really liked it... Morning mom, morning dad." Lena said as she entered the kitchen on a murky Tuesday morning. An off the shoulder ...
Feb 7, 2010 -
Re: Snow
Wow, I had a very clear picture of one lonely snowflake descending and landing with the rest of its snowflake friends. This poem since so short, is very welcoming to ...
Feb 7, 2010 -
Re: Gray
I really liked this poem; I guess that's because how short it was. It was completely vague and left it on a loose end for interpretation. Also, I like how ...
Feb 7, 2010 -
Re: Child of the Moon - Prolouge
I think this is an excellent start and the errors I saw were already touched by everyone else. I'd really like to have been able to read more, and you ...
Feb 1, 2010 -
Re: They say love.
Hey! I really actually like this poem, it wasn't one of those fake, "oh he loves me," or, "It was a stupid lie," it was really realistic. You know how ...
Jan 31, 2010
