Published February 8, 2010
Maybe I should’ve known.
Maybe I should’ve guessed.
Maybe I should’ve thought.
That you weren’t the best.
Maybe I should just think,
And get over it... or atleast try.
But every time I think...
All I think, is why?
I cant just stop it.
I've tried it before.
Believe it or not, you fixed it.
Because all I could do was adore,
The way you smiled
But it will be a while,
Till I see that smile again.
Your with her, and shes great and all.
I just don’t want to see you hurt... or get broken..
And fall.
I don’t want to cry, but sometimes its hard.
Just hold it all back, and try not to bawl.
Don’t worry. I'm fine. Shes nice and sweet.
Just now I know. That well never be.
Together.
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oh thanks alot! ill work on the rhyme and stuff. but thank you! :]
Hey FazoliMoli,
I really liked this poem, it was heart felt but not so dramatic. The only thing I can comment is how you only rhyme on occasions, or well the other way around. I think you need to pick either to rhyme or to let it be a free style, but it's still good the way it is. I enjoyed and look forward to reading more.
Keep writing,
Erin