Dream_Catcher

good. simple. but good. i didnt catch any grammatical errors, but other than that i like the build of temptation but i think the title kind of takes away from ...

I like this but i have a few bones to pick. well i think the repetition is fine as the end rhyme but perhaps changing the 'one things for sure' ...

i like this a lot! i like the fact that it is a journey and the full circle-ness of it! :) only thing that kind of erked me was the ...

alright. i understood all of it except for one line. Tears fall inside perhaps you should elaborate. other than that i agree with the comment before i did like the ...

Alrighty! Well I like the concept of giving and the way you used it. I'm not one to pick on grammar because if i'd probably make it worse if i ...

WELCOME TO YWS!!! :) but for the poem it was very simple. I didn't really notice any obvious grammar mishaps but as for the style I believe its more of ...

hmmm well i'm a christian and i feel you on the topic and your message. I'm not really going to comment about the style of the poem only because I ...

hmm this is very interesting and very original i must say. i've never read a poem about a cigarette or wanting one. Anyhu to the poem. very smooth with language ...

Okie dokie. The poem flowed very smoothly; it has a good rhythm. However, with the words i find it a but cliche. The concept is used I'm sure you know-- ...

i think everyone in YWS can connect to this. its simple and good. not too much 2 report besides that. i believe somebody already mentioned the first rhyme which i ...

WELCOME new member!! and about the poem :) I think it has a simplicity to it that makes it good. Living her eternal nightmare Called "Life" these lines are a ...

i love this poem. very very well written. every line made perfect sense to me and was a little sad but clearly from the heart. the feeling of wanting something ...

Hello there new member and welcome!! anyhu about the poem. I understood the beginning well about the moon, but when you went out of that you kind of lost me. ...

Ok in the beginning it seemed to be moving rather smoothly but when you hit the 'mold' line it threw me off a little. It also got a little abstract ...

i suppose i will be the devils advocate for a round here. I have to say the poem is not my favorite. I think much of it is 'spoken' language ...