DottieSnark

This chapter was amazing! So creepy but it also had me on the edge of my seat. You let me with all these new questions. But you also gave me ...

This chapter was chilling. To start off with that romantic, sensual scene and then move onto Claire overhearing Jay tell something that kind of sounded like a threat…well it sent ...

Another great chapter! It was engaging, with great characters and description and you SPaG is great too. As soon as this chapter started I was hooked. Debbie said “It’s happening!” ...

Hi Elinor, I was going through the green room and saw that the next two chapters of this story were still there so I decided to start at the beginning ...

Hey! I just read this and the previous chapter and wanted to let you know you have a great story here. You’ve created a mystery and an interesting world I ...

Wow this was a dark chapter! But it was also so good! To start I want to comment on media format you chose to use: you wrote this as a ...

Hi John! I just read this chapter. It’s got some really great imagery. You really paint a picture with your words and scenery really comes to life. You also utilize ...

So I’m all caught up on your posted chapters! Yay. I really do love this story and the world you’ve build and I want to see where this goes. However, ...

Hey Zrillis! As you can tell I’m going through all your posted chapters tonight. :D Another great chapter! I really sympathize with these characters and your scene descriptions are great. ...

Every time I read a new chapter the improvements from the last blows me away. The pacing again was amazing and I like the switched between the Aria scenes and ...

Hey Demoncat! Sorry it took so long for me to write this review. Anyway, I love this story and I can really see how passionate you are about it. Also, ...

This is your best chapter yet by far. First of all, it was so much easier to read and follow. And your transitions from the diary entries to Marie recalling ...

Hi there! Read your story. I liked it but I think if you cleaned up the formatting a little it would be much easier to read. The basics of dialogue ...

I'm glad you're continuing this story. There are a lot of tiny errors that I think coud easily be picked up with a more careful read through by using spell ...

Oh my God, that little girl is so creepy! I was actually expecting her to keep being the bad guy, but somehow by the end of the scene, you got ...