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DevanEWilliams

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: It Was More Than I Could Stand

    Hello! This poem is great in how you don't come right out and say what went on, but you are still able to fully understand it. Sometimes, it's better to ...

    Aug 29, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Gravestone pt.1

    Hello there! I'm going to review this if you don't mind ;) Let me just start right in with it, I guess, and then I'll get back to my overall ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: when i was young

    Hey there! Awesome poem you have here! It seems simple at the beginning, but it gets deeper into a more symbolic piece. One thing that I think you should work ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Bloody Knuckles

    Hello there! Just so you know, I don't read/review this type of story very often so my suggestions may or may not work for you. That's perfectly fine. Here we ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: I need help Believing....

    Hey there! Your poem had a really good message that pretty much everyone can relate to. Unfortunately, a few confusing line/punctuation things caused me to misunderstand your meaning when I ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Phone Rings Again...

    I looove this story! It is so funny, yet it's a bit sad. I think it can also be symbolic....or maybe I'm reading too much into it, I don't know ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: When I lost you

    Hello there! I think what you have in this story is great so far, but there are some things that could definitely be refined more. First, you have many grammatical ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Beasts

    Hey there! You have a wonderful poem that can be interpreted in many different ways. Your images are great, and you can really get a good sense of what the ...

    Aug 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Again

    Hey, great poem! Your imagery was awesome! I have two smallish things that I would like to point out. You don't have to change it, but it's just what I ...

    Aug 26, 2011
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: [Post Deleted]

    Hey Hayden! So I'm just going to point out a few things that I noticed. (It's wonderful, by the way :D) One thing that kinda irked me was the fact ...

    Aug 18, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Touchless

    Hey there! Your story is quite interesting so far! I'd like to see what happens; it definitely has lots of potential. There are just a few things that need worked ...

    Aug 14, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Yes or No

    Hey there! First, let me just say that I thought this story was really interesting. It's written quite wonderfully. It was kind of sad, but so very hopeful at the ...

    Aug 12, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Alice

    Hello! First of all, let me just say that I love your writing style. You describe things in really beautiful ways so that I can see it very clearly in ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Hell's Rollercoaster

    I love this so much! It is so hilarious! This is such a great poem I just can't get over it! :D I love the absolute irony that the rhythm ...

    Aug 8, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Trailer Trash

    I really love the tone that you have established in this. It's perfect for the subject matter. Your rhymes are good and the stanzas are well-divided. Nice Job! One thing ...

    Aug 8, 2011


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