Demeter

The title caught my eye immediately; a little prince or princess lives in everyone of us! Did you know? That you are a princess Too pretty for princes And to ...

The reader can really identify with the girl, I think. You've written this well. Sometimes I feel incomplete. Often, it feels like a big chunk of my world broke off ...

No "*"'s in a story. Write the whole word or, if it's too harsh, use an another one. There were also a fair lot or spelling mistakes, like proceded --> ...

Hello! I picked this piece to read when I saw it was about POTO. I'm a great fan myself so I decided to give it a try. The grammar was ...

This was very fun to read. I like your style. And, you're exactly one month older than me! Isn't it great? :) I don't really find anything to critique (and ...

A hit in the face for everyone in YWS! A nice evasion of "I've had enough of all your boring work!" :) Great one, E. So you want to be ...

Hello. I agree with Eimear on the fact that the structure could and should be better. People can't see where a stanza ends and another one begins. However, the flow ...

Hi! Typing, typing just typing. This was nice, but add a comma after the second typing. Do the same in all the "typing, typing" bits. I type to stop the ...

Hi! I noticed there weren't any crits yet so I decided to give it a try. Lies, all lies, Everything in this world Is a lie. I didn't feel this ...

First of all, I think it's great that you've got the music, too! This is the first song with music I've read here. Though I have to say that the ...

I hope I can be of any help, I haven't reviewed many lyrics here yet. You aren't seen Although this is grammatically correct (right?), it sounded awkward to me. Could ...

Hi. I picked this one to read because I saw there were none reviews yet. So first of all, you truly, madly, desperately need to divide this into clear, readable ...

That was funny. And yeah, I guess this could be radio material. But just to let you know, I'm not maybe the best person to review this since I never ...

Okay, hi. I haven't reviewed many lyrics here, but I'll try my best. I agree with Jamie on the repetition thing, but then again pop songs do that a lot. ...

Hey, E! Here by request :) Oh, you like my new avatar? Okay, then to the poem. I like very much about the lining and construction of the stanzas, the ...