Demeter

Hey, BBB! I sorta liked Meranda Briggs. Just a little though ‘cause she was that likable kind of person. But on the ride home with the devil, she said she ...

Hey hey! Why was she just now frantically worried about my health? The emphasis on the word "now" would work better, if the word before it was "suddenly". And you ...

Hey BBB! Here I am, once again, after good night's sleep :) This is so lightly written it stays interesting, points for that. However, I do have a few nit-picks, ...

Hey. This is slowly becoming my secret pleasure :lol: Every night I write in this journal, and every night I go to sleep in tears. The meaning of this sentence ...

Hey, here I am again! :D I woke up this morning and ate a bowl of cereal. Hmm... the fact that he wakes up is self-evident, as people usually wake ...

Hey, BBB! I just got a random feeling I should read this. And here I am. :) I can’t remember a day when I wasn’t four sizes bigger than anyone. ...

Hey there! He doesn't know, that I need him. The one guy that's for me, has always been in my class. All of the girls know the answer, that boys ...

Hello, kinzygirl! someone who cries because your crying, someone who laughs when you are mad, It should be "because you're crying". What's with the second line? Laughing when someone else ...

Hello, clograbby! I kind of agree with both Adam and GML. You have a very nice writing style and you can use it well, but the real story was a ...

Hello, BloodSunset! Unfortunately this left me feeling the same than bubblewrapped. I think it would better to have a short but touching, moving and deep poem, than to have a ...

Hey kittykat! Yeah, I think the Narrative Poetry would be the one. After all, you're telling a story. This was a little random, I have to say. The stanzas aren't ...

Hey, complexion! This wasn't bad at all. Maybe one of your first poems? It was a little emo, but that's alright. Though, leave my body to rot into nothing. For ...

Hey, star! I liked your rhyming and lining – in most parts. He scampers up the hill. The sun, no comma here is shining bright. Joyfully, he this line (and ...

Hey, niteowl! The idea is great; it sure touches everyone (well, almost everyone) and I'm no exception. We sang and danced to cheesy pop songs because we believed In here, ...

Hello Stella! I couldn't quite get the story, but never mind. The poem itself was really beautiful. You say that you're no poet, but at least you're poetic person... does ...