Demeter

Hey there, TI! Here by request ;) I actually thought this was pretty good. There are two main problems: 1) Punctuation You know, commas, points, colons etc. They basically didn't ...

Hey, Butcher! Haha. This sure was weird. There was something really fascinating, though. Maybe it's the fact that the Southern accent was just oozing out of this, you could actually ...

Hey, Ringo! Haven't seen you in a while :) I didn't have an idea of the song until I came to the last line, so let's leave it alone for ...

Hey there, sofiel! I think this has great potential, but is not just there yet. In the middle I got a little frustrated of the repetition, though. Don't get me ...

Hmm. It's way better than the first poem I wrote! :) The title got me, I love the movie... *wink* On some parts, I felt it was too telling and ...

Hey, BBB! What are you talking about??? "It's not that scary"? Hey, this was the scariest part of them all! Really! If the next ones are going to be even ...

He-hey there! I love those dictionary starts! Don't ever stop them! Love! “Where you raped?” It should be were . “Anne,” Dad said to Mom, “I think she did to ...

Hey, Jared! I noticed your story "The Ouija Board" as the Random Literature Piece and got interested by the title. Then I was doing something else, and forgot the title, ...

Hi, clograbby! “Yes…okay…I know….I said I know mom, I’m going up the mountain right now,” I explained even though I was still on the long stretch of road that seemed ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! I think this is such a good idea, and by expanding and editing it you could make this into something great. So it's definitely a ...

Hello again, Lauren! I decided to pick a random literature piece to review and this was it. :) Her hand trembles under mine, like I am a monster. Hmm, I ...

Hey! To me, it was a little too telling and, like jMin said, straight forward. As summer seems to be something you're quite passionate about, you could've done a lot ...

Hey! I love rain, so the title got me immediately. And the poem was lovely. The drip drop part is cute, it reminds me of "Little April Shower" in Bambi ...

Hey, Vow_of_Silence! Hmm. I liked the atmosphere and the emotion in this poem, but I feel you have a lot of punctuation problems. It also kind of disturbed me that ...

Hey again! Okaaay, that first part was really random. Haha. But maybe it's good that we get to hear about something else than the fat thing. It was still random. ...