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Hi, Creativityrules! I must say I didn't like the repetition all that much. All the "shh"ing and "ing"ing actually made my head ache a little bit. I do like the ...

Hello Lumos! I think this poem was rather lovely. I liked the eyelashes, shoe laces, striped tie, a bakery in St. Louis and much more. It's lovely, but it's not ...

Hi there, Idraax, Flem, Gatherer, and Daughter! Wow, first off, let me say that I've never read a collaboration between more than two people! I was thinking to myself that ...

Hi there SmylinG! :) First off, let me say that I love the title of this "collection". I picked this one to read mostly because it had fewer comments than ...

Hi there, Storyweaver! Just flecks, spots - Lines, lines, lines. This feels much too abrupt. I liked the rhythm in the rest of the stanza, but the last lines are ...

Twit. Twiiiiit. Twit twit. I feel a surge of frustration. I can’t seem to win against these rules—they slip and slide in my grasp like a bar of soap. Usually, ...

Hi there, Joshua! Here as you requested :). I killed a lamb last week. I loooove this opening sentence. Love it. Creepy as it may be. You know you can’t ...

Hi Sionarama! Finally, eh? “Peter Pan was always fickle. You would never know what he would do next. That just added to the excitement, the attraction, I suppose. He had ...

Hi there, Horus! Sorry for keeping you waiting for so long. :o There probably won’t be much point behind it, but I presume that it might evoke some feelings in ...

Hi Gal! Here I finally am, sorry for being so slow. That ... I I really like the rhythm and the rhymes of this stanza. It seems to flow off ...

Hello, Kagi! Finally! The disgust that framed, almost glowed in every neighbour as they walked by me killed my mother. Framed what? It's a nice word, but if you're not ...

Hi there! Sorry for not getting back to you earlier. :) I looked around from the corner, where I sat in a faded brown chair, holding a cup of strong ...

Hi there, Talkingbird! I think this was quite a nice piece to read! I especially liked your metaphors of "ordinary" things like scarves and cookie-cutters. I also liked "hard earned ...

Hi there! As the silver midnight moon shines down upon the never-ending forest. This isn't a sentence, since it's missing the verb -- maybe you want to combine it with ...

Hi, AngelMarie! Charlie Johnson rushed his wife Abigail to St. Francis Memorial Hospital in Columbus Georgia. This is too much information (=names) for one sentence, especially when it's so short ...