Deifyance

Hello! My name is Deifyance and i'm doing the review I promised! :D I would like to start with making the disclaimer that I am not a poetry writer, and ...

Yay! I loved this chapter! (I loved the others as well, don't worry.) I can't help but feel your enthusiasm when you describe what going on around our disgruntled little ...

Hello, my name is Deify and I'm going to give you a short, to-the-point review based on pacing and story. (Which is my favorite kind of reviews.) Let's start off ...

Hey there! I went back and began reading this after Chapter 10 was posted. I wanted to catch up. :) It seems everyone has already nit-picked the grammar to heck; ...

Awesome Job! A few things I noticed: The captain interrupted. Okay Gamma group, prepare for some alien butt! Prepare for some alien butt!... I'm guessing to kick some alien butt? ...

WoW. I'm a film enthusiast and have made quite a few. This looks like a very very nicely made script. I might only suggest that each cut is separate and ...

Very nicely written. and coming from an extremely Christian boy I have to say that those May not be Christians whom you described. The World has given Christians a bad ...

Goodness! you make my prologue look like a 3rd grade simple sentence book. It was very well written and produces a moderate amount of suspense. The cliffhanger was not cliche ...

Good idea. I have a feeling this is going to be along the lines of Matrix? One thing. If the creature is talking, how is it's mouth sewed shut? and ...

Wow. very nice. I'm deeply impressed. Grammar is not my strong suit so I'll stick to content. Good: The characters. You told us right away what kind of person the ...

WoW. I just finished Misery by SK and you for some reason reminded me of that book. Which is good. Okay, I stink at grammar so I'll stick to content. ...

Hey, I have a question. Did you purposely name the "Special Forces" after the popular USA Propaganda film Red Dawn? I also feel that, like in the real military system, ...

One word...... Hell YEAH .... finally some real action on the pages of good ole' YWS. Yoyu made my day. Awesome integration of fantasy and modern or sci fi which ...

Awesome story! good job. Content was awesome, looks like a perfect or close to perfect start to a nice nasty plot. Only thing is watch out for that detail. Lots ...

Hey! Good Job! My only thing is you might want to expand a bit in the prologue. That sounded (At least to me) like you just slapped it together. I ...