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Re: Only Good at Beginnings
This was not bad. What I admired most was the quality of your descriptions. You've built up a subtle amount of suspense that has made me want to look forward ...
Mon Apr 14, 2014 12:49 pm -
Re: Welcome to deh Family.
Huh. A poetic welcoming message to all of YWS. Whatever next? It practically promises no worries about this website. However, as much as this is a nice welcoming message, don't ...
Fri Apr 11, 2014 11:59 am -
Re: Victory
This was a very insightful essay. I never thought of victory that way, but now when I think of it, it only makes perfect sense. Any of my English teachers ...
Tue Apr 08, 2014 6:03 pm -
Re: Hope
Welcome to YWS, historylover1. I hope you have an enjoyable time on this website. Ha, hope. I'll begin with saying that this was extremely long. It's better to separate it ...
Mon Apr 07, 2014 3:24 pm -
Re: Deleted
Nice poem, my friend. When I read the first line, it made me think of Game of Thrones. I only recently started watching that show. I read this and I ...
Fri Apr 04, 2014 10:53 pm -
Re: Elementárni ~ 1.1 *adjusted*
Okay, I have no idea where this is going, so that can be seen as a good sign. But, at the same time I'm not exactly sure what this exposition ...
Thu Apr 03, 2014 11:03 pm -
Re: Freedom
Why does this stick out to me so much? I read this and I think of it as a rallying cry for individualism--something I treasure. This is something that, if ...
Sun Mar 30, 2014 10:02 pm -
Re: Mr.Fellows
Was this meant to be a comedic piece? If not, I apologize for taking it that way, but it is, I praise you wholeheartedly. I agree with most of what ...
Sat Mar 29, 2014 1:27 am -
Re: Love me forever. (a short story)
Seems like an everyday love story: Forbidden love, "I will love you forever", "My one true love", "My heart cannot go on without you"... I'm sorry, but while this was ...
Sat Mar 29, 2014 1:16 am -
Re: File: Unnamed #1234456
Hmm, I read this and what immediately comes to mind is a poetic premise for something very undesirable that is about to happen. It seems as though the narrator is ...
Sat Mar 29, 2014 12:51 am -
Re: Jon
First of all, I would like to say, welcome to YWS!!:D I hope you find this website exciting and know that everyone here is ready to review your work and ...
Mon Mar 17, 2014 4:49 pm -
Re: What Lies Beyond the Wall
That was quite the dystopian. This guy's determination to find a better world, only to see it destroyed was amazing, yet extremely heartbreaking. I mean he was so bent on ...
Sun Mar 09, 2014 3:15 pm -
Re: Love Me, Your Socio Chapter 1
Oh my, oh my, oh my.....I read this earlier but I didn't have much time to give you a review, but here it is. First of all I was really ...
Thu Mar 06, 2014 3:03 pm -
Re: Sunday
Hmm, this was a beautiful poem. What I really admired was your imagery and the way you somehow made me feel the poetry. It had atmosphere, it had depth, and ...
Mon Mar 03, 2014 11:50 pm -
Re: The Worst First Day Ever
Well you set up a large amount of suspense and foreshadowing that I might as well think that this was supposed to be the prelude or prologue to the beginning ...
Sun Mar 02, 2014 1:53 am
