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Re: Only Good at Beginnings
This was not bad. What I admired most was the quality of your descriptions. You've built up a subtle amount of suspense that has made me want to look forward ...
Apr 14, 2014 -
Re: Welcome to deh Family.
Huh. A poetic welcoming message to all of YWS. Whatever next? It practically promises no worries about this website. However, as much as this is a nice welcoming message, don't ...
Apr 11, 2014 -
Re: Victory
This was a very insightful essay. I never thought of victory that way, but now when I think of it, it only makes perfect sense. Any of my English teachers ...
Apr 8, 2014 -
Re: Hope
Welcome to YWS, historylover1. I hope you have an enjoyable time on this website. Ha, hope. I'll begin with saying that this was extremely long. It's better to separate it ...
Apr 7, 2014 -
Re: Deleted
Nice poem, my friend. When I read the first line, it made me think of Game of Thrones. I only recently started watching that show. I read this and I ...
Apr 4, 2014 -
Re: Elementárni ~ 1.1 *adjusted*
Okay, I have no idea where this is going, so that can be seen as a good sign. But, at the same time I'm not exactly sure what this exposition ...
Apr 3, 2014 -
Re: Freedom
Why does this stick out to me so much? I read this and I think of it as a rallying cry for individualism--something I treasure. This is something that, if ...
Mar 30, 2014 -
Re: Mr.Fellows
Was this meant to be a comedic piece? If not, I apologize for taking it that way, but it is, I praise you wholeheartedly. I agree with most of what ...
Mar 29, 2014 -
Re: Love me forever. (a short story)
Seems like an everyday love story: Forbidden love, "I will love you forever", "My one true love", "My heart cannot go on without you"... I'm sorry, but while this was ...
Mar 29, 2014 -
Re: File: Unnamed #1234456
Hmm, I read this and what immediately comes to mind is a poetic premise for something very undesirable that is about to happen. It seems as though the narrator is ...
Mar 29, 2014 -
Re: Jon
First of all, I would like to say, welcome to YWS!!:D I hope you find this website exciting and know that everyone here is ready to review your work and ...
Mar 17, 2014 -
Re: What Lies Beyond the Wall
That was quite the dystopian. This guy's determination to find a better world, only to see it destroyed was amazing, yet extremely heartbreaking. I mean he was so bent on ...
Mar 9, 2014 -
Re: Love Me, Your Socio Chapter 1
Oh my, oh my, oh my.....I read this earlier but I didn't have much time to give you a review, but here it is. First of all I was really ...
Mar 6, 2014 -
Re: Sunday
Hmm, this was a beautiful poem. What I really admired was your imagery and the way you somehow made me feel the poetry. It had atmosphere, it had depth, and ...
Mar 3, 2014 -
Re: The Worst First Day Ever
Well you set up a large amount of suspense and foreshadowing that I might as well think that this was supposed to be the prelude or prologue to the beginning ...
Mar 2, 2014
