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DeepCrystal

  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, General Re: Only Good at Beginnings

    This was not bad. What I admired most was the quality of your descriptions. You've built up a subtle amount of suspense that has made me want to look forward ...

    Mon Apr 14, 2014 12:49 pm
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Welcome to deh Family.

    Huh. A poetic welcoming message to all of YWS. Whatever next? It practically promises no worries about this website. However, as much as this is a nice welcoming message, don't ...

    Fri Apr 11, 2014 11:59 am
  • Article / Essay » Other, General Re: Victory

    This was a very insightful essay. I never thought of victory that way, but now when I think of it, it only makes perfect sense. Any of my English teachers ...

    Tue Apr 08, 2014 6:03 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Hope

    Welcome to YWS, historylover1. I hope you have an enjoyable time on this website. Ha, hope. I'll begin with saying that this was extremely long. It's better to separate it ...

    Mon Apr 07, 2014 3:24 pm
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Deleted

    Nice poem, my friend. When I read the first line, it made me think of Game of Thrones. I only recently started watching that show. I read this and I ...

    Fri Apr 04, 2014 10:53 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Elementárni ~ 1.1 *adjusted*

    Okay, I have no idea where this is going, so that can be seen as a good sign. But, at the same time I'm not exactly sure what this exposition ...

    Thu Apr 03, 2014 11:03 pm
  • Poetry » Culture, Other Re: Freedom

    Why does this stick out to me so much? I read this and I think of it as a rallying cry for individualism--something I treasure. This is something that, if ...

    Sun Mar 30, 2014 10:02 pm
  • Poetry » General, Other Re: Mr.Fellows

    Was this meant to be a comedic piece? If not, I apologize for taking it that way, but it is, I praise you wholeheartedly. I agree with most of what ...

    Sat Mar 29, 2014 1:27 am
  • Other » Historical Fiction, Romantic Re: Love me forever. (a short story)

    Seems like an everyday love story: Forbidden love, "I will love you forever", "My one true love", "My heart cannot go on without you"... I'm sorry, but while this was ...

    Sat Mar 29, 2014 1:16 am
  • Poetry » Horror, Dramatic Re: File: Unnamed #1234456

    Hmm, I read this and what immediately comes to mind is a poetic premise for something very undesirable that is about to happen. It seems as though the narrator is ...

    Sat Mar 29, 2014 12:51 am
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Jon

    First of all, I would like to say, welcome to YWS!!:D I hope you find this website exciting and know that everyone here is ready to review your work and ...

    Mon Mar 17, 2014 4:49 pm
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, Dramatic Re: What Lies Beyond the Wall

    That was quite the dystopian. This guy's determination to find a better world, only to see it destroyed was amazing, yet extremely heartbreaking. I mean he was so bent on ...

    Sun Mar 09, 2014 3:15 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Horror Re: Love Me, Your Socio Chapter 1

    Oh my, oh my, oh my.....I read this earlier but I didn't have much time to give you a review, but here it is. First of all I was really ...

    Thu Mar 06, 2014 3:03 pm
  • Poetry » General, Spiritual Re: Sunday

    Hmm, this was a beautiful poem. What I really admired was your imagery and the way you somehow made me feel the poetry. It had atmosphere, it had depth, and ...

    Mon Mar 03, 2014 11:50 pm
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Supernatural Re: The Worst First Day Ever

    Well you set up a large amount of suspense and foreshadowing that I might as well think that this was supposed to be the prelude or prologue to the beginning ...

    Sun Mar 02, 2014 1:53 am


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