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Re: Oh, What a King!
I love satirical tone of this poem. I can actually feel the irony that it offers. A king thriving off the suffering of his people and punishing anyone who defies ...
Wed Jul 26, 2017 10:20 am -
Re: admit it
Wow, I was not expecting that ending! What I thought would be a sappy breakup poem ended with a sassy bang! Kudos for slapping my assumptions back in my face. ...
Fri Feb 03, 2017 11:42 am -
Re: Chapter One
You were definitely not kidding around when you used the word "dark." And I must say I am mildly impressed. You have pretty much put many people's thoughts about "The ...
Sat Jan 28, 2017 11:35 am -
Re: Apprehension
Well, this was very short and the very simple, yet with quite a punch. Jealousy can definitely stem from an overabundance of low self esteem and more often than not ...
Sat Jan 21, 2017 6:06 am -
Re: eh
Oh, dear God in heaven...... I am not going to ask you to tell me if this is autobiographical or if this is from your imagination, but this is still ...
Sun May 08, 2016 8:06 am -
Re: Last Night
Wow this actually felt like an immature exchange of mouthy young adults who rely on sexual and cruel humor. Talk about deja vu. It's always fun to read a somewhat ...
Sun Feb 21, 2016 7:50 am -
Re: Contemplating Suicide
Very powerful and emotionally gut-wrenching. The song "Hurt" by Nine Inch Nails (or Johnny Cash) kept ringing in my ears. You're right, suicide is not an option. It is an ...
Sun Feb 14, 2016 11:50 pm -
Re: Beautiful Couple
Intense. When I read the part about the swollen lips I was wondering was Jack responsible for that? Maybe her brother? Reading the first part, this felt like more of ...
Sat Feb 13, 2016 4:59 am -
Re: Subaquatic - Chapter 2
Wow, heartbreaking and intriguing all at once. I know all too well how hard cancer can be on someone. My aunt died a couple of years ago from complications from ...
Sun Jan 24, 2016 5:18 am -
Re: Reaper Academy: Chapter One
That was very, very creative. An educational institution for reapers. I'm excited to see what these "houses" are. Just the concept reminds me very much of Harry Potter. You definitely ...
Fri Dec 25, 2015 2:52 am -
Re: Slap
Oh...my...Gooooood! What a chant! Well, at least I thought it read like a chant, if not a rap. Am I not entertained?! I am very entertained. When did card games ...
Sat Dec 12, 2015 4:12 am -
Re: Narcissus Betrothal
This is my first review in a couple of months so bear with me if I seem unclear or anything of the sort. Wow, this almost feels like a proverb. ...
Sat Nov 21, 2015 3:12 am -
Re: The Sonnet of Lochlan Doyle - [1]
That was intense. This boy definitely needs some anger management and fast. I can almost feel how this is affecting his sister and even his mother, which by the way ...
Sun Oct 18, 2015 4:27 pm -
Re: The King of Swing -Chapter 1 (in part)
Okay, welcome to Young Writers Society! You can call me Crystal and here to offer you some insight. This was average debut. It had a good sense of drama and ...
Thu Oct 01, 2015 11:01 pm -
Re: Science at large
Interesting. I hate science, but this this is interesting. I agree with most of what Halfbloodcheetah said, and I second them. And more. What part of this represents you? This ...
Tue Sep 15, 2015 3:20 am
