Deathcurrent

Well I think everyone caught all the stuff that I was going to mention, so.... I'll just say keep writing! :D Deathcurrent

At sunwater : There may be some flashbacks, I haven't decided yet, but when she said magic she was meaning that she could use it. I'll try to make that ...

Wow! I truly did forget about YU-Gi-Oh. Thanks for bringing him back from MY forgotten memory. I think that my favorite part in this dialogue is: Joey:Oy -.-' Honda:Awwww Joey:I ...

Wow! I truly did forget about YU-Gi-Oh. Thanks for bringing him back from MY forgotten memory. I think that my favorite part in this dialogue is: Joey:Oy -.-' Honda:Awwww Joey:I ...

Wow! I truly did forget about YU-Gi-Oh. Thanks for bringing him back from MY forgotten memory. I think that my favorite part in this dialogue is: Joey:Oy -.-' Honda:Awwww Joey:I ...

Wow! I truly did forget about YU-Gi-Oh. Thanks for bringing him back from MY forgotten memory. I think that my favorite part in this dialogue is: Joey:Oy -.-' Honda:Awwww Joey:I ...

You might want to add just a smidgen more to the prologue. Then it will be a nice short prologue with the benefit of being longer to get us readers ...

I'm looking for a new name for "W". If you have a suggestion, post it on my wall, PM me, or write it in your review. The rest of chapter ...

You know when you have a really great story going, but you can't figure out the names of the characters? I have that problem more often than not. SOOOOOOO.... I ...

I like it! I can hear the music that would go with it. How many times would the chorus repeat? Is this the whole song? If not I hope that ...

I like how you pointed out that women need a man, but that many also don't need a man. It shows how women have become more independent and that there ...

Great poem! I like how you use repetition to empathize that the tree is dying. I think the ending was a little short, but very emotional! Keep up with the ...

Wow, I'll be sure to look into it.

I think 4 would be a great choice.

Wait a minute, what is going on? A little more detail before can go a long way. It sounds like a good start, but some more background information would really ...