Deadman

Well, I definitely connected with your piece. I loved the piece and stirred up emotions within me that I thought I had crammed down into nothing. Seeing as I struggle ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS. I'm here to review you today. First I'd like to say, I love the opening scene. It really opens up the story nicely. My other comment ...

Dang! This is (heh excuse the pun) dark and chilling. A couple of times I had chills run down my spine! Well I'd like to welcome you to YWS, and ...

Hi, and welcome to YWS! Alright, well I loved the story! Normally I hated fragmented writings, but the way you pulled it off was amazing! The imagery was so amazing! ...

Hey! Deadman here for a review today! I'd first like to welcome you to YWS, and I hope you are finding your way okay. If you need any help shoot ...

Back again! I'm still loving this story, and it's interesting to finally see a little more back story on Cleo. Again I haven't found anything wrong that I can correct. ...

Hey again! Guess what? I clicked on this chapter too! Like I said I'm really loving this story, and I can't help but read it, and it saddens me that ...

Well I've gone back and read everything, I'm loving this even more! It's a little fast paced and jesus Cleo sleeps a lot! Oh well though that's past. Let's talk ...

I haven't read any of the prior chapters, but this one has got me going back to them! You opened up, and I didn't feel like I had missed much, ...

DarkPandemonium beat me to everything I was going to correct. So now I guess i'll talk about the story and not pull out stuff to nitpick. So when I read ...

Well this started off right into the action with a brief background. I understood the background and knew where this was going right away. The story had some of it's ...

Deadman here to review! First off I'd like to say welcome to YWS, and I hope your finding this place suitable. Next, this piece was just great to me. I ...

First off welcome to YWS! The title grabbed my attention, and the fact that it's genre was Romance. The opening came on harsh, having the word sex in the very ...

Hey! I'm back to review you. So as everyone prior to me has stated, there is great detail. I'm not even done with the first paragraph and I'm already painting ...

I said I would be back now didn't I? I'm generally interested in stories such as these. This one deviated away from a lot of the drug addiction, but I ...