DarknecrosisX

Sorry, accidentally commented. :)

Thanks a lot for your feedback, and I appreciate your comments, but your relation of my story to the medieval periods is... quick. My story is set in a completely ...

A lot of dialogue is what I meant to say. I probably had a brain fart XD

I'm English, the z in mesmerizing is an s in the English spelling.

Playing to the crowd a bit? ;) People don't like unless you're popular or the piece is REALLY good. Just the way YWS works I'm afraid.

^ I meant differences between English and American English. Curse me for try in to use misleading words.

Thanks for the review. I'd just like to mention that most of the typos you picked up on (at least in the review), were alternations between English and American-English, eg. ...

Ah, I get where you going with this. Fair enough. But you need to realise that to replace the lack of character background you will need to create a powerful ...

The description and plot was indeed inspired by the Slender Man.

I just realised you did supply the link, so I'll shut up now.

I did not describe Tyler because he was not the focus of the story, the effect I was trying to produce was that he was generic and normal, adding to ...

You are correct, but I did much more research on him than just playing the game. I guess you could call me a fanatic.

Hey there, emotional poem, a unique structure with well laid out stanzas. I especiall like the line at the end: "I will drain my veins of more ink than you ...

Really interesting, it grabbed my attention quickly in the first paragraph. However, I found a few little mistakes: 1. 'Jess is reminding people that I exist, hanging up flyers of ...

The actual work has been relocated here: For those who want to review it :)