DannieInkblotHanson

Hello there and welcome to YWS! I am here to write you some stuff that you hopefully fin useful. Here I go. The character you are making is very interesting. ...

I do love some scary stories. Here are some thoughts on how to improve your spine-thrill abilities! Leave off the ALL CAPS MOMENTS. Building suspense relies heavily on being subtle, ...

Oh sweet lord, it's like Inception and Polar Express had a baby. And I love it. Okay, here goes Dannie's epic rant. Your imagery is stupendous. The way you described ...

I like the way you're going with this. Here are some things to think about: There were a few typos and nit-picky grammar things, but after a quick scan you ...

Good little thing you've got going on here! Here are a few things you should consider. The first thing I noticed was that the structure of your sentences was a ...

You've got the makings of a good little thing here! Here are a few tips and tricks to try. Your plot was pretty good, but as a reader I felt ...

As I was reading this I was hearing a very enthusiastic old British narrator in my head. I don't know why. But I liked it. I really like this and ...

So here I was, sitting and watching my absolute favorite show and looking for review material, when suddenly your words sprang out and punched me in the face. Rarely do ...

This is surely the makings of a good little tale. I like it. Here are some things I thought of. Good: I like the name scheme. They're all appropriately fairy-like ...

Wooooow! Me gusta! Here are some things I wrote for you! I like your writing style. It was fluent and gripping and I liiiiiked it! Your diction was fantastic. As ...

Way creepy. Way creepy indeed. Good: The omniscient perspective was pretty great. It created more suspense for us as an audience and magnified the dramatic irony by a lot as ...

Daaaaaaaaw that was adorable. You, my friend, are a fantastic writer. Good: I liked the whole little farcey thing you had going on. It was super funny and cute. Will ...

This is a pretty good monologue! Here is some stuff to think about. Good: Your stage directions were good. But maybe you should make them a little less specific so ...

This is the makings of a good little story! Here are some things I wrote for you. Good: I like the whole automaton thing! It was super quirky and fun. ...

This was a really well-written piece of work. Here's some stuff I was thinking about Good: keeping it very simple. Your names to the bad guys were simple and that ...