DakotaK

Well... I was making a list in my head as I read about what you should change but... everyone else already pointed them out:) So, I'll be your cheerleader! Go ...

I'm going to review your piece, I promise:) It's just that I don't have tons of time on my hands to sit down and read a lengthy piece like yours ...

Hey Tayla, it's me! You asked me what I thought of the piece... well I really enjoyed it! You need to work on showing instead of telling though... the MC ...

You Go Girl! Slight cliche' with the riches to poor, hidden princess stuff but still, I liked it! I think you did an awesome job creating their world (more detail????) ...

The first thing I noticed was your paragraphs... you need to break them up a lot! When a subject changes you should break it down with an indent for smoother ...

Wow. It's very vivid and you portrayed Val's horror and soul beautifully. The inside soul of a Hollywood dame. You mentioned this is an excerpt... from what? It was kind ...

Ok, you've got the start to a story... but I hope it's just the start:) Nothing much happened. Other than being set in the future, nothing reached out and grabbed ...

I really enjoyed your Poem. I write poetry sometimes and it takes me five hours to sit down and drum something out until I'm halfway pleased with it. I'm impressed! ...

Poetry is neat because you can write anything you want, any way you want. I liked that the message you were portraying passed over easily to the reader. Though it ...

I'm going to review your piece, I promise:) It's just that I don't have tons of time on my hands to sit down and read a lengthy piece like yours ...

I definitely think it's a great start to a story. If you're an avid reader and you start to write it's always a task to push everybody Else's idea away ...

This story has potential. You kind of just send the reader flying head first into the story though. You have no idea where you are, what just happened to the ...

Hey Shina, Your story was awesome... I loved the characters and your style of writing, thanks for suggesting I read it! Writing Fantasy Fiction is my favorite thing to do, ...

Hi Zanna, I really enjoyed reading your entry. It was very creative and well-thought out. :lol: I thought it was neat how she created her own worlds and also created ...

Wow! Amazing job! (No, you shouldn't turn back lol) I wrote a story off of 'What Path to Take' as well and it's neat to read what the picture brought ...