CrystalSorceress

I really liked this. I've always been fascinated with this period of history and I think you captured it very well. The main thing that really struck me as possibly ...

I think you have the beginnings of what could be a great poem here. I think it could be a little better if you maybe added a few words to ...

This was good. I didn't notice a lot of errors; if there were any, I was too involved in the story to notice. :) I really liked how you kept ...

To be quite honest, I think you have a great idea here. The writing is also good, but the one thing that bugged me was that the opening part set ...

There wasn't a lot I noticed in here that really needed help, but here's what I noticed. They didn’t let go of each other, both letting their tears flood down ...

I think that this has great potential. I loved it, for most of the same reasons as Kepe. I love the idea that the queen was actually trying to help. ...

On the whole, this was good. As Kitty says, go for description, and it'll be even better. I also agree with Kitty on Lady Julia. Everyone else seems to be ...

Okay, the first thing I want to say is that the ending was wonderful. As Kitty said, in some ways it was a little predictable, but at the same time, ...

I really enjoyed this (as usual :-)). On the whole I didn't see a lot that wasn't already mentioned. There was one little nitpick-y usage error, though. I'm not really ...

I liked this a lot (as usual! :-)). I think the story is going in a very interesting direction, and it's quite intriguing. I especially like the ambiguity of the ...

This was a dream? Wow. I never have dreams that would ever be worth writing down. If I could get inspiration that easily, I would be one of the happiest ...

There's a couple of things that confused me here. For starters, I think you should proof read this, because there's many places that were confusing due to improper punctuation. I ...

I think this is greatly improved from the last draft, although there are still a few little nit-picky things that you might want to change. I noticed that when you're ...

I think that this piece both shows a lot of promise and needs a lot of work. It actually reminds me somewhat of problems I've had with my writing in ...

I think that Kitty15 got most of the errors, but there were a few other things that I noticed. “Lady Diana, it is time for bed.” Diana looked up from ...