Crysi

Yeah, this doesn't have the punch that part one had. Still amusing, but only as a random little sketch. Actually, it reminded me slightly of Rosencrantz and Guildenstern are Dead ...

Good luck! *is still chuckling* This was very amusing, in my opinion. At first I thought there was a deeper message - you know, how the new "religion" is love ...

Wow, this is one of the longest poems I've ever seen! (And I mean that fondly, no worries.) I really, really, really like this piece. It's... very long, as I've ...

Congratulations! You've won Crysi's Critique of the Night! (In other words, I decided to critique this before I pass out, lol) The United States of Grey Imagination Interesting title... Slightly ...

'Ello, Wormy! Er... ;) Very, very cool. I disagree with Prongs, though - I was STILL a little unsure as to what was going on, and I enjoyed it immensely ...

It's odd... I'm tired tonight, and don't remember clicking on your poem. I was looking at a different one I had critiqued earlier, to see if changes had been made, ...

*TWITCH* Honestly, I couldn't stand the book. The philosophy was presented in an idiotic fashion, and the plot - assuming there was one - made me wonder if someone slipped ...

Well, I have to disagree with everyone else - I got it, and I laughed out loud when I realized what the poem was about. I love how you make ...

Haha, Jiggy. (I like your sig by the way. Nice.) This was kind of cool, actually. I've written a few free-form poems like this before, and I'm not sure they ...

This reminded me of The Corpse Bride. I agree - stop using commas! I almost couldn't get through it because my mind would pause at the end of each line ...

I wrote a poem like this. And even gave readings of it a few times. Of course, it was a video parody of many things, including emo poetry. I'd give ...

Hey HeadInTheClouds, I'm just going to quickly skim in this critique since I REALLY need sleep tonight. I agree with those who said it was too cliche, and I'd like ...

I don't know... I feel like this is more of a conversation than anything else, like it's something you'd say to me if I told you I was considering dropping ...

Okay, so, spell check is your friend, and it's even a free added option when you go to post. Just a first thought. Second thought: Why should I, as the ...

It was... interesting. Not completely new, but not completely cliche, either. Personally, I like the [admittedly fractal] part, brackets and all. I'm just not sure about the line length. At ...