Crysi

You know, I think the problem with this is that it just doesn't have a point. Why should we care? If there was a divorce or some other constant problem ...

What's with all these cannibal poems? Was there a challenge I didn't know about? *laughs* This was... pretty good, but some of the rhythms and rhymes were off, so it ...

It's a word, Tep. I think I remember something about Woodrow Wilson using that word to convince the nation of his plan, but I'm not sure. Anyway. Who doesn't know ...

...Claudette, this is not helping your claim that you are not a disturbed young lady. You have a good rhythm going, and the rhyme helps the whimsy. *laughs* There's really ...

This keeps sticking in my brain. When I first read this, I have to be honest -- I wasn't fond of it. In fact, I'm still not fond of it ...

Okay, it's my turn, as promised. The warm rays from the sun radiated onto my face as I leaned against the oak tree, the rough bark rubbing against my back. ...

Cameron! Your title caught my eye immediately, as I actually have synesthesia, and I've been trying to explain to members in the chat exactly why I freak out when they ...

They don't know what's so fun about shooting an empty can of beans with a rifle--is it the way the can jumps into the air on a successful hit, the ...

Mm, this is a great start, Jack. I apologize for not getting to it sooner! Just a few nitpicks: The food is boiling, perhaps for too long, because the hot ...

Overall, I thought it was okay. The sentences are simple, and so they don't really capture my interest at first. Someone else mentioned the show-don't-tell rule, and it's difficult to ...

Mm... To be honest, hon, I don't really like it. I'm sure we've all felt the feeling you're trying to express here (I know I have), so you need to ...

There's a reason you hate rhyming poetry. There are a lot of forced rhymes in here, and it just doesn't work. Drop it. As for the subject itself... Just another ...

This is... cool, and I really like the focus on "you" and the imagery and such, but it needs a better punch for the ending. What's your point? What's the ...

This is an interesting idea, and I could actually see a lot of allusions to different legends and stories. There are a few reasons this doesn't work for me. 1) ...

Indeed. If you added an explanation I'd have to slap you. ;) The only part I have a problem with is the second to last line. Perhaps "Why the habit ...