Crysi

If it is indeed stream of consciousness, why get so defensive about it? So someone didn't like it. Suck it up, princess. People have different tastes. When you post your ...

Uh, spend more than five minutes on it? Seriously. The problem with this poem is that it doesn't connect. You start out with a really creepy, really cool idea, but ...

Just wanted to point out: "Lily" is spelled with two "el's", not three. (I'm using "el" instead of "l" due to the confusion between "el's" and "eye's", if you get ...

Just to add my two cents on the ending -- I think it's fine as is. Telling more would be redundant and just bog down the story, taking away the ...

Wow. I really like this. Maybe this is just how I'm reading it, but I feel all the mentions of "I" are like pointing inward, saying to herself, "Has it ...

Actually, I like the effect the last stanza has. Yes, the second-to-last stanza is powerful, but maybe too powerful an ending. The last stanza softens it, and goes back to ...

I really like this. It has a nice, easy rhythm to it, and it flows off the tongue. Reminds me of Gwendolyn Brooks' "We Real Cool" poem, actually. I like ...

No no no! WCW is my hero, don't get me wrong. But you see, what he did was create a sort of concrete poem with his style. Look at the ...

Oh my. The sad thing is, this actually reminds me of something. See, Jack started this religion years ago... Very well written. Sounds like something that could be found in ...

Hey Gadi. :) Let's see what I can do with this, shall we? All the Birds \ By Gadi C. All the birds have flown up and gone; A lonely ...

I actually really liked it. :) 'Course, Clau's such a little demon she probably couldn't relate... ;) (Hah, love you, Clau.) Really, though, I thought it perfectly portrayed how humble ...

Bessie, the emo cow, says: Eeeeeemoooooooo. Sorry. This didn't do anything for me. See, the thing about writing is that even if the readers don't know what you're talking about, ...

One snarkilicious critique, coming right up! (By the way, in your description of the story, it should be "My cousins and I," not "Me and my cousins.") "What!? Autumn is ...

Oh wow. Morbid, much? This is really sad. I love the point of view you decided to go with, though. At times, however, it didn't seem like he was seven ...

I laughed, at first, but then I realized that's actually a brilliant thought, too. Very clever combination. It could really go either way, you know? Potential energy turns into kinetic ...