No no no!
WCW is my hero, don't get me wrong. But you see, what he did was create a sort of concrete poem with his style. Look at the stanzas. They form wheelbarrow shapes. That only enforces the imagery, yes?
Doesn't work with your poem, obviously.
It's very hard to pull off this style of poetry, and I'm afraid you didn't quite cut it here. I can't think of a way you can format the stanzas so it will work, unfortunately. I do admire your courage in trying, though, and it was a good idea, if only a little misplaced.
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