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I can't help but smile and chuckle as I read this. She definitely deserves to have a song. Of course, if you know me, meter and rhyme are my niche ...

This is certainly different than what I'd write for "blue ball". Still, though, the story is captivating and interesting - in fact, it's even beautiful in a way. I'll explain ...

“Vi! What are you doing?” I could hear the terror in his voice, groping at his throat and shooting out of his mouth. The guitar was a little heavy so ...

Well, this is an interesting piece, to be sure. Index: 1. Spelling/grammar 2. Consistency Check 3. Content Review 4. Closing Thoughts 1. Spelling/grammar Always the easiest part of the review. ...

Wanna try help me get better at poetry, YWS? Well, I'll do my best. :wink: Index: 1. Grammar/Spelling 2. Word Flow 3. Consistency Check 4. Content Review (I haven't reviewed ...

Ah, it's rhyming poetry. This is my favorite type of writing to review. Now, please remember that this is all constructive criticism. Every mistake pointed out is an opportunity to ...

Rip it up. You want me to rip it up? Challenge accepted. Here comes the shredder. :twisted: 1. Spelling and Grammar check ...deviance, and adventure. we could have gotten drunk ...

Index: 1. Grammar/spelling 2. Meter and Flow 3. Rhymes 4. Content (Note: I had to add this index halfway through the writing process because the Meter and Flow section takes ...

Starting out, I just want to say: Argh! Right in the feels! Seriously, though, this poem has some serious depth to it, and I can't help but wonder if it's ...

It definitely sounds like an intriguing premise. I can see a lot of potential in this piece, and the different concepts about severing the gods' mortal connections instead of actually ...

It's a clever and interesting premise - the contrast between the different spells is very creative, the names are original, and the affection that Vinegrasp has for Shadow is portrayed ...

You know, I like writing poems with messages similar to this. However, this one has a particular style that gets more and more appealing as I read it. The wording ...

I used to think that your writing style might not fit this kind of story, but now I'm coming around to it. The word choice and clause syntax creates an ...

Well, as requested, here's your critique of this piece. And what a piece it is, indeed. Bad news: ...Perhaps a couple of ill-placed ellipses... maybe a grammar mistake here or ...

Okay... let's get started with a couple things I need to go over. Please keep in mind, I am in no way insulting your piece without the intention of making ...