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Thank you i used some of your suggestions and I liked them I didn't notice half of those things.:)

I liked this piece it was intriguing. Keep writing.:)

I really like this. I like the way you worded it. And i really like how I can relate. You're good. Keep writing.:)

I liked this it was really great but when you wrote it and you put "Let then mourn no more." i love the way you stated it but is it ...

This is really good. I like how I can relate to it and I understand where it comes from. How you can write such good work amazes me.:)

I agree with Busheldood and in the second line where it says "The sight of you, made miss all the things we shared." i think you missed the word me ...

i like this it is very good in my opinion.:)

Your story was great it was really good i thought there were a few typos like instead of supernatural you put supernaturaul and werewolves you put wewolves but over all ...

i honestly think that ur story was great i absolutely loved it hooked me and thats all i have to say.:)