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Re: Caught in the Past
I like this essay. I have never read this book, but now I kind of want to! I am unable to find any grammatical errors in this essay so hats ...
Apr 26, 2020 -
Re: Burn
this is a great piece! although I almost hesitate to call it a poem, despite the lovely rhyme scheme, no, this is more like a dramatic monologue from a play. ...
Apr 24, 2020 -
Re: everything i brought from home
I really like this! the poem is broken up in a way that makes sense and the parts all connect in a nice way. I like the use of commas ...
Apr 24, 2020 -
Re: Luhfint
this is a very cute story. I like how simplistic the style is. Writing an adorable short story with 7 words is not an easy thing to do, and you ...
Aug 11, 2019 -
Re: tragedy
I really like this poem. I enjoy how structureless it is, really leaving it open to interpretation. your use of punctuation is commendable, the only thing I noticed is a ...
Aug 11, 2019 -
Re: what a time..._day 1
wow. this is absolutely beautiful. I must admit, this is my favorite type of writing, like seeing someone else mind. I find this to be an absolutely fascinating concept. you ...
Aug 9, 2019 -
Re: What If... Prolouge
this is a promising start for a story. I like the way you didn't explain everything, and how you wrote it with vague details and imagery. it makes it more ...
Aug 9, 2019 -
Re: late-night love
this poem has a very unique feeling, perfectly encapsulating that liminal feeling of the late night. I noticed that you didn't capitalize your "I"s and I would almost recommend leaving ...
Jun 19, 2019 -
Re: I am bleach.
this is a very creative poem. I like that you never actually mentioned bleach in the poem, yet the title still ties in so well. here are some things I ...
Jun 19, 2019 -
Re: Foolish Beliefs
nice another stream of consciousness essay! these are my favorite. I like the tone of this piece, it is very sad and lost sounding. I have to say, I can ...
Jun 19, 2019 -
Re: polarity
this poem is great. I like your usage of rare words like "dalliance" and "tenebrosity". they really give the work a lovely feel. I few things I noticed: "and my ...
Jun 18, 2019 -
Re: Nothing kills a man faster than his own head
this is an absolutely beautiful piece. I have read many of you're poems and noticed you are good at creating a sort of melancholy hope in your work. you are ...
Jun 18, 2019 -
Re: To (**), (**) and everyone who broke my heart
This poem is both lovely and sad. there is much raw power behind the words and enough of a buildup to make a mic-drop at the end feel warranted. here ...
Jun 15, 2019 -
Re: feeling lonely
hey, Mage! here to review your piece. overall, this is an amazing poem. you can really feel the emotion you are trying to convey. I have to say, as a ...
May 31, 2019 -
Re: disruption
this is a lovely poem, I like the way you use figurative language. I am unsure if the lack of punctuation is intentional, but it makes the poem I bit ...
May 30, 2019
