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Re: Doll on a Shelf
Hmmm I really like this poem, I felt like I coul relate, I also liked the rythm but unfortunately you lost it in the last paragraph. I like the words ...
Aug 4, 2009 -
Re: After All This Time
Wow, I really loved the ending. I felt swept up by it all, very nice. The end almost made me think about that song of Slipknot, Dead Memories in my ...
Aug 4, 2009 -
Re: Shall I compare thee to a summers day?
Dam, this is amazingly beautiful, I loved the way you composed it, the rythm and the ryhm, also the words, very well done! Gold star! I don't really know what ...
Apr 13, 2009 -
Re: Bloom of the Rose
Dam, it is amazing that anyone can write something in Old English like you can, not many people of today can write like this. I must say it was really ...
Mar 31, 2009 -
Re: The Court of Gilded Birds: cheeseball fantasy extraordinaire
Hey! I am the first to crit this, yay. First let me say that I really like your grammar or the way that you construct your sentences, I also like ...
Mar 31, 2009 -
Re: Not The Norm Stereotype
LAUGH OUT LOUD! That was brilliant!!! I think my favorite character is the elf haha hilarious! I really like the way you write and the whole comedy theme, I kind ...
Mar 31, 2009 -
Re: Butterfly Wings
Dreamwalker, I just have to say that I really loved this piece of work- it was so original and different, not just that, the simplicity makes it altogether beautiful. The ...
Mar 31, 2009 -
Re: Alone
It's very deep, I like it. A few things though: 1) I like "a plastered scream" very visual. 2) "ON her cold pale head" It would work better if you ...
Mar 29, 2009 -
Re: Removed
Hi! I liked it! The way it is written and the way you use a little amount of words in a line- it added tot the feeling and atmosphere of ...
Mar 12, 2009 -
Re: slight smile
Hey Armagan, welcome :) Firstly I like the fact that she (a 'reject') saved the boy's life, it's a good story line. Although I do think that you write in ...
Mar 2, 2009 -
Re: Concrete Apocalypse
So well done! I loved the way you used metaphors and how it drastically changed from a happy and peaceful atmosphere to a dreadful and darkening atmosphere. The way you ...
Mar 2, 2009 -
Re: Faerie Dance
Hi MonsieurRosseau I liked the rhythm in the poem, it sounds like a song a band like MyChemicalRomance would play :P I did like it a lot, although at about ...
Mar 2, 2009 -
Re: Duality
Wow, I liked the story, and all the metaphores. I also liked the fact how certain things or things that happened connected with the subtext. Like the way he walks ...
Feb 21, 2009 -
Re: Eternal Love ~
Hey there! Firstly I would like to say that I did like this piece, it works with one's emotions. I do have a few thoughts though: -Well, this reminded me ...
Feb 21, 2009 -
Re: Heaven
Well, I liked the story, but for me it read a littlebit difficult. I think it is the way you put it all together and the word coices. Also, what ...
Feb 12, 2009
