Church

I read the first one, became addicted. Read the second and became obsessed. Then I bought the thrid one in an airport (how stupid of me) I had figured it ...

I sort of got eh impression at the beginingthat the boy was the MC. I didn't see any grammer errors that havent already been mentioned. I did like the atmoshpere ...

You get sloppy with I capitalization at the end so fix that. It was a turn from what I usually read or think but it was good

no problem. The military is one of my biggest issues right now so I know how it is. I would like to ask. What was the inspiration of the story. ...

The only thing I think should be changed, besides what the others suggested, is Mathmatical should be scientific explanation Math isnt used for anything esides calculation and money in those ...

if you didnt like it sorry but if you did the rest is coming as soon as I stop being to lazy to type it but most likely within the ...

I just want to know the meaning..anyone...

not the best at puntiuation but I think the first letter of every line needs to be caped

you have a uniqe style that you need to push and show what it can really do if you thought of this easily i would like to see what happens ...

nice death scene but why the the guy not at least try to stand up for the girl i havent seen the competion but this is nicecly written and I ...

if you keep going this would be just great now add some more first name basis characters and you have a great novel...if it was but longer good job

ok is the rest out yet now im curious to know what happens and who got stabbed and edited out...crap its almost as bad as Eva withdraws

i dont have a job yet but mondays should always end like that some time to relx after a hard day...i guess school would do almost the same as work

the only thing i saw through the poem was you need to cap the first letter of every line but dont trust me on that one not a poetry expert

it was good but i didn't stick with me to the end it might just be me well it probibly is just me