Chiridawn

Hello Vivian, The plot and scenario is very interesting, the cliffhanger is well done - I especially love your use of conjunction (the repetitive 'ands') to indicate a very fluid/panicked ...

The title is interesting -- really makes you think after reading the poem! I would recommend adding some more punctuation to indicate the pauses; I found myself reading it almost ...

I am by no means particularly talented at poetry, but here are some comments regarding your poem/ballad. (On an unrelated note, which one is it?) Overall, the feel of the ...

I like it! Especially the commas when you write 'you just eat my center part', it reminds me of a pop song, a very cheerful one. And the topic, can't ...

I love how light and humorous this poem is! Like misstoria noticed, there is a lack of punctuation. One thing you can keep in mind while writing and editing is ...

The topic you're writing about is very interesting, as it is quite a big thing in modern society. Very abstract, perhaps too abstract. Try putting in a bit more of ...

Amazing poetry here! I take it that it's from the perspective of Romeo as he holds Juliet in his arms. I love how lyrical it is, the rhyme giving it ...

My first impression is the abstractness of this poem, despite this, you've managed to make the topic quite clear, even without reading the title, so I commend you on that. ...

Argh, I wish I could read Swedish, but I will try my best to review the English version. The subject is very abstract, but quite beautiful. It addresses an age ...

Oh ho, I believe they are haikus! 5,7,5 :) I believe you are talking about the seasons, and seeing your comment down there, you are. I feel the first haiku, ...

Firstly, I would like to say I love the subject of the poem. That is after the first reading. Now, the first stanza is excellent. I look in the mirror, ...

Fear makes us scared, Fear makes us brave. It's one of the ingrediants, Of how we are made. It gets us excited, As it takes us through life. I love ...