Chirantha

Oooh, different kind of story isn't it? Great work. But your character wasn't made in a great way. I mean she wasn't described well. Okay, nit-picks, "Run away! Emily, you ...

Well, what should I say? The others had already pointed out the mistakes. But first I like to say, that what's this story about? It doesn't seem to have an ...

Amelia getting better and happier, eh? Okay, to mistakes, When I’d walked into a science lesson, Er.....how can you walk into a science lesson? Better change that to "When I'd ...

I sorry to review the seventh and not reviewing the fifth and sixth ones. I really sorry, sky. :cry: But I will right after I review this. Okay, this is ...

Oooh, ghost stories. yay! I like them alot. Now, I can see the fear and scariness in this story, but I can also see that your ideas suddenly jumps from ...

There are many things I should say. Firstly, you can't have "hi" as a topic. And the story's name shouldn't be in the topic description. Secondly, you had written a ...

Okay, firstly, Hi, welcome to YWS. I get straight to the review. And I'm reviewing your revised edition. Pain. Fear. Loneliness. Separation. Sadness. Put 'commas' after each of these words. ...

There are so many gramatical, spelling and other mistakes. I'll try to correct them all. I think I can Say your character is a girl. The fires roared. The only ...

ooooh, tempted little girl is she? Okay, it was too small to make out what it is like. I can say that your character is a girl who is craving ...

This story has horror, romance and fantasy. I like it. But I was slightly digusted by the vomiting scene, but it was unique. I mean, no one writtes about it. ...

WOW, just wow. What else can I say? I mean not a single mistake, Thrilling description and magnificient feelings. Wow. You really are nearing J.K. Rowlings. You wrote this in ...

I think the cliffhanger was an awesome idea to this story. Greatly written. Okay, the mistakes I spotted, “Riley stop worrying,” exclaimed Sam. An abrupt start of the story, you ...

This reminded me of The sims 2 Castaway. Good work. This was pretty short, considering its beggining, but greatly written. What are they going to find on the island? People? ...

Oh, poor, poor Amelia. How sad. :cry: Good descriptions, as I say I everytime. "Who am I? I'm me! I'm Amelia, Mum!" Change it to "Who am I? I'm Amelia! ...

Oh, how sad. You are right, it takes a sad twist. Well, I suppose you are getting better. No mistakes as far as I can see. This time you only ...