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Re: The Roman Fights:Ch.1 Sparta
Rule #1 never make it long Rule #2 never make it short These are the rules I go by when ever I post something. Why? Well is something is too ...
Jun 17, 2013 -
Re: The Fading - Chapter One
Okay so I only seen like one or two mistakes it mainly had to do with wrong words. Like: ' the young paramedic raided the bruise on her forward with ...
Jun 16, 2013 -
Re: The Boy
I really do like this it has a feel to it like after the second stanza I was hoping that his father comes. I like how you rhymed is spots ...
Jun 15, 2013 -
Re: A Single Black Rose (Chapter 2)
Oooo I smell romance. Okay so its a good chapter. Wish is was a little longer but hey get always get what you wished for. But I enjoy how it ...
Jun 15, 2013 -
Re: A Single Black Rose (Chapter 1)
Hello, one thing I saw was 'she didn't want to lose her precious man who paid for her bills.' 'she didn't want to lose her precious man who paid her ...
Jun 15, 2013 -
Re: What's Beneath the Surface- Chapter 2
OMGOSH....I hate but yet love it all at the same time. Okay Im going to skip to the end. OMGOSH I love the end. She likes him so much and ...
Jun 14, 2013 -
Re: What's Beneath the Surface
OMG I so hated how it ended but I loved it all the same. What happens next, or does it go back (like a flashback). I love the words you ...
Jun 8, 2013 -
Re: Will You?
This title caught my eye, so Shar-rae is here with a review or just a random comment. 'are kept in a corner of my heart' don't think you need the ...
May 10, 2013 -
Re: I miss us
'because I amscared of the rejection.' 'because I'm scared of the rejection.' or 'because I am scared of the rejection.' 'ensueif ' 'ensure if' 'I miss you playing my song ...
May 9, 2013 -
Re: So many ways to go...
Hey shoaib, just want to say so understand the title once I started reading. Haunt your forever. Haunt you forever. I like how this stays on one top. Hate that ...
May 9, 2013 -
Re: The War Unknown: Death of Professor Festus
Okay love how you put French in this, because I'm taking a French class at school so I understood almost everything. But my French teacher did say that in the ...
May 9, 2013 -
Re: Chapter Fourteen of The Lost Legend - Isaruas Betrayal.
I so hated how they fought. I thought that Jacob would be on his side but now it seems like he was against him the whole time. That's not nice, ...
May 9, 2013 -
Re: Losing Control chapter two part one
Sorry for the comment below my friend messed with my computer. 'widened in to a drive way' don't think you need the in 'widened to a drive way' but if ...
May 9, 2013 -
Re: Chapter Eighteen of The Lost Legend - Mind Training Center.
Okay so I had reviewed like almost all of these but I lost it so I don't really remember what I had put on there. But I know that I'm ...
May 9, 2013 -
Re: The Cataclysmic Triplets Chapter Two
Okay so I see that they have magic, but I have a feeling that will be reveled in later chapters. I like what you did with the reason on why ...
May 9, 2013