Chaser

Disclaimer: I have not read the previous chapters. With that said, happy Review Day. Surprisingly, there are no overhanging issues here, just a few minor problems scattered about. But first, ...

Happy Review Day! Structurally, the perspective is a bit confusing. When you say that "The howls and growling of fighting wolves carried her speech away," it throws me off, since ...

Happy Review Day! I'll start with nitpicks (crazy, right?). In the beginning, it felt like you were starting too many paragraphs with "I." Beginning too many paragraphs the same way ...

Happy Review Day! This is a respectable variation from the classic tale. I especially like the wolf's catchphrase, I think it's...Fantastic. But since this is a review, I'll have to ...

Happy Review Day! This piece is, perhaps, the pinnacle of wistfulness. And I absolutely adore it. You completely nailed the tone, the way you inserted the narrator's thoughts as you ...

Circly and Squaire. Beautiful. You've got some excellent technique and characters here, but it seems to be hampered by one issue, and luckily, one issue alone. Repetition. Repetition. Particularly, re

Happy Review Day! We'll start with the issue I've noticed lately. You don't really give the most dazzling descriptions in the world. I mean, it's okay, but it isn't quite ...

Hello again. Well, I don't see many grammatical errors here, so good on you for that. Characterization seems well-put. I guess that the only thing I can dispute with here ...

First piece? Sweet. As a whole, this piece was an exciting read. The part where the plane crashed was especially well-done. One thing I'm wondering about Max himself is his ...

Reading without context is sometimes fun. You've got no grammar errors, and your only spelling errors are "from out camp" and "Mnotaur." As a whole, you tend to start many ...

Ooh, plot twist. Grammar: Paragraphs. Geez. The comma after stopped should be a period. It's been his plan. your parents will stop fighting for the most part. He slowly got ...

Chasing this story down. Prepare yourself! In the first sentence, you may want to scrap the semicolon format, and replace "; when" with until. In the second sentence, you used ...

Hello there. You've got some excellent plot, coupled with impressive characters and dialogue. However, the description tends to be choppy in some places. Here are some things I noticed: You ...

Hello there. Beginning the review...actually, there's not much to review here. I mean, you could put in a more varied vocabulary, but there's not much that's wrong with this piece. ...

Hello there. I've put off reviewing this for a while now, because it's such a delicate topic to broach. While I don't entirely agree with the philosophical points here (probably ...