Chaser

What a love story! But I think the title could do a little better. After all, it's just the lovers' names, trailing off into the story. It could be a ...

I see you're channeling Erin Hunter's Warriors series! Well, let me step in. Comma Placement: Where commas are needed by convention is after your dialogue tags, if the sentence continues. ...

Hey. I thought I'd swing by for Review Day. Better late than never to fulfill that promise, right? I love Fen's character, and how likable he is as a shapeshifting ...

Have a review! So, first of all, plot. Main character has a mystical martial-arts-hack power. Cool. I'm not sure why you felt the need to have a disposable gonk pervert, ...

Hello, I'm Chaser. You've certainly got a nice piece here. Allow me to review. It was kind of questionable to start the story like that. The main problem lies in ...

Chaser, at your service! To begin, plot: excellent. You've really got a gift for internal conflict. The slow deterioration of the setting helps with that as well, complementing the theme ...

Apologies and happy Review Day! Beginning with plot, this story seems to flow pretty well. While Kalihr's message is a little predictable (I mean, he's the enemy, and Avalon recognizes ...

Time for a review if you don't mind. To begin, the plot here is flowing smoothly. While I do think that the romance here might be a bit too obvious ...

Like a flash of lightning, I review! Starting with the plot, I enjoyed the way you balanced together Raj's everyday routines with the supernatural element of Arathus. The "voice in ...

Well, I encouraged it, so I'll review it. First off: plot. Well, you've certainly set the tone for this piece. While it's difficult to spot Jack's character flaws right now, ...

Not posting the rest? That's a shame. To begin, you've got a fine lead on the plot. We're already getting a feel for the larger forces at play, without any ...

Okay, let's start! Plot: The bar was a nice choice of setting, and the underlying techniques you use are impressive as well. While I'm pondering over the mystery of Warren's ...

Hello there! I'm a reviewer. Plot: So, it's not the best I've seen. Old man sacrifices himself, ancient monster, dangerous allies; I've seen it before. The story is carried more ...

So, this is how it all ends. All in all, a solid read. Obviously, the most dynamic feature of this segment is plot. You could see it coming, but you ...

Oh my. Well, the plot's a big part of this. Spiritual writing is a touchy subject, but I'll try my best as a fellow Christian to handle it respectfully. First ...